|Reviews for Never About Me|
| Just me.Jessie B chapter 1 . 4/26/2004
Thsi poem is very good and almost made me cry. I am sitting at school so i can't cry but I really like this one bust maybe i am missing the big picture. Why was he crying and who was he. I understand the hurt and blood but i dont get him.
| Naede chapter 1 . 4/19/2004
this is awesome hey you should write a poem for me my b-day is april 30. i want a poem for my birth day o and do you want me to tell aiko adair happy b-day for you? hers was on april 13. hey i will ask my mom tonight if i can go to the library. hey where are you?
| Story-Teller's Aide chapter 1 . 4/15/2004
okay, up 'till the end i thought it was really brilliant. you seemd to have a perfect balance, some not lighter but easier(?) verses. however, the second last stanza seemed like you wrote it intending it to be the last and then added another one on. i have done this plenty of times, but it doesn;t always work. it would be great if it was the last, but as it isn't i think that never about me shouldn't be repeated three times. instead,maybe,
but i shall stay here,
worried about you,
never about me though,
never about me.
i don't know, i just think that whatever you do, the current repetition doesn't really fit into the rythm of the piece, it kind of stops it flowing for the last verse. consider.
| LegendaryPunk29 chapter 1 . 4/9/2004
I hear watya sayin and i can understand it, sort of. great work here, I really liked it. Nicely written and nicely formatted. great piece of work, keep writing
If you can, please r and r some of my work, it will mean a lot to me!