Wow! The last line packs a punch. It hurts, too. That last line. Remember that, alright? If you ever go professional, remember this poem. Although when I read through it again, the painful part is the word "dark." This is just a suggestion, but do you think it would be even better to say something like, "Where it's always dark" instead, just so you have the word dark be last? I dunno. But to clarify-hurting your readers like that is not a bad thing. Making people feel is important. I really, really think you have something here.

Well however this poem is for forget him/her/them cos you have a gift...

It's like you read my mind and how I feel came into your work. It's nice to know other people feel the same. I love your style!

Not really about unrequited love. More like the loss of friendship(s), I think. Well, that's horrible... I don't even know what my own poem is about...

... don't you just hate unrequited love? Not anyone's favorite topic, especially if it's happening to *them*. Well written, kinda depressing.

That's so sad . . . more unrequited love (isn't it?), not my favorite topic, but it certainly was well-written! Great job, keep it up!