|Reviews for Can Anybody Hear?|
| i was a postcard chapter 1 . 5/5/2004
Okay, okay, you're right. I've been lazy in reviewing! But I don't remember when I stopped reviewing (although I have been reading, just so you know) so I'm just going to start from the top and then review from there until...I have to go to bed or something like that. So, this song! I wish I could hear the music to it, cause songs always *sound* so different. That's why I have a hard time reviewing songs. They seem to have so much more meaning when you can actually hear them. But I must say, I really REALLY like this. The whole Confused Boy finds Dreamer Girl thing was really...hm, the word "cute" comes to mind, but it sounds condescending. Which it's not. Well anywho, I really like this. D It's great stuff.
| Verbal Essence chapter 1 . 4/13/2004
i'd suggest a little tightening up on the lyrics
overall the message gets through pretty clearly, but there are some places where the lyrics lose a little bit of flow
you could throw in a few metaphors to create more imagery
| eviljackinthebox chapter 1 . 4/12/2004
Nice. That's quite good, but have you put it to music yet? That would be cool. Keep it up!
| Linnet chapter 1 . 4/12/2004
Wow! Amazing! I really love this, so powerful. Thanks for posting this.