|Reviews for Unworthy|
| EWindheim chapter 1 . 8/30/2004
oh...this is definately one of my all time favorites! If only I had more room on my favorite stories list. GAH! Oh well, this is just so so so so amazing! Great job!
Your one and only liebling,
| Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 4/30/2004
wow ive felt this way before too. sucks but hey, part of life. nice poem.
| Karasu no sei chapter 1 . 4/18/2004
absolutely beautiful description. I especially love "Joy becomes a bitter memory,/I have fallen away from myself" and "Watch me fall to myself, alone,/You cannot help me now."
| Cari-anne chapter 1 . 4/13/2004
Very descriptive, hauntingly almost. And I'm sure you'll break free.
| A Pink Spider chapter 1 . 4/13/2004
This sounds like something a metal band like Iced Earth or Bling Guardian might sing. I suspect, though, that sounding like a Tolkien Metal song was your goal. The stanza that starts "Watch me fall to myself, alone" would definately be the chorus.
The 'chorus', as I 've dubbed it, shows a great amount of rhythm which is largely missing from the 'verses' which get the point across. And what a point! I can't be sure what inspired it, but I must say, you eloquently expressed your point. Bravo.
| I Found Myself At 24 chapter 1 . 4/13/2004
Great job, as usual! The end was cool, but I think my fave bit was "In the story of failure I am a tragic hero,
My demons fly upwards to bind my will again, I fall down, down, dragged towards the embers of my inequities." Well, as I said, great poem and keep up the good work! :)