Reviews for Endless Pain
mizu no kokoro chapter 1 . 4/18/2004
Well, hello again. a few things: isn't it sore? not soar? don't over do the rhyming now~ some typos, which i think u'll figure out when u read it over~ a couple of lines in there seemed odd, or at least in my opinion, or maybe u don't need my opinion? meh, i'm paranoid~
Was it a fight with a good friend? these things happen, but then, who really knows~ how did he betray you exactly? clarify on that point, makes the reader more interested in the situation.
~Never the same~