Great work, I like it, it's kind of like 'Lord' Tennyson, which is awesome because he was one of the best poets ever! You should check him out sometime, maybe get a book at the library or something. Anyways, the scheme was good, I play around with my structure a lot and I can never get it right! Anyways, that was great, lots of praise, thatnks for reviewing!
~Echo

Excellent! Simply excuisite! Keep writing!

Wewow, its abit long! i like short poems so its hard for me to pass judgement. I really dont know what im talking about as I know little about long poems. But it does flow well they perpetual rhyming is a bold feature and stands out with the choice of words in my mind at the end, it was a little overdone but i can only put that down to my love of short poems really. I'm sorry I cant be of much insight. Thankyou for the review atleast, it isnt meant to be comfusing, it makes sense if u read it a few times i guess. Getting back to your work i do like some of the word choices, it shows a good vocab and intelligence. Well done on the descriptive side, absolutly fantastic to be true. I like it, a sad tale it is too. a few good bits I could pick out but generally its the middle bit, i wanted to say stanza but there are not any! well done really, good poem
Thanx again
Nine Iron

please review this! thanx