|Reviews for Clouds|
| Bob Story Builder chapter 1 . 3/1
Lot of shifting of phrases which gives impression of mood swinging.
| Starpoet chapter 1 . 9/6/2004
Umm, it'd flow better if the 5th line went "I see your toment, your eyes clouded over with misery". But I love it! Keep writing, you're on my favorite author's list!
| Lilly Leapfrog chapter 1 . 7/9/2004
| Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 5/13/2004
| invalid id chapter 1 . 4/19/2004
I see your torment, your misery cloud your eyes
| Matthew James Current chapter 1 . 4/19/2004
I like the idea, when don't you have a good idea? But I would love to see what this poem would be like if you extended the imagery a little and helped us get to know this brown-eyed girl a little better. _