Reviews for My Strife, My Life
Michelladora Moon chapter 1 . 1/23/2008
Wow, that's really deep. I love it though. I can empathize exactly how you felt. You're a really great writer.
Desert Roses chapter 1 . 12/8/2004
this is realy good... maybe it will get my friend to stop cutting... who knows. I need to talk to her as it is. G2G but great job!
Icy Arya chapter 1 . 11/10/2004
I love it..) Especially stanzas 3,6, 8, 11 and 14. The imagery and diction is beautiful..more power to you!
EWindheim chapter 1 . 8/30/2004
You have a way of taking words found in other poems and using them in the coolest, most imaginative ways. This is definately a favorite of mine. One of your best pieces.
RedGlass chapter 1 . 5/1/2004
The best use of the words "and I forget to breathe" I've seen yet! Be proud of this one, you did more than well.
Karasu no sei chapter 1 . 4/29/2004
Beautiful. Wonderful last stanza, a small fleck of white that shines amongst the darkness of the rest of it. Not meant in a bad way, but it just sums up perseverance (i can't spell
Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 4/22/2004
nice nice yet again. wonderful poetry
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 4/21/2004
Fantastic. A good piece here! Keep it up!
Thanks for reviewing my work!
A Girl in Denial chapter 1 . 4/20/2004
What a beautiful poem! I love the repetition of lines. It's repetitive, but not in an overwhelming sense. Nice job!
HiddenFlame42 chapter 1 . 4/20/2004
Another one that would make a good song. Fave lines: "As the Pain wells up, It fills this mortal cup, To its very brim," *applauds* Well done! :)
KyoulNabby chapter 1 . 4/20/2004
Wow, I am so adding you to one of my favorite authors list.
This poem draws its strength from the straight foward essence of the three lined stanzas. And the repetitive lines of "And I cry crimson tears now,/And I shed crimson tears" brings not only sorrow but forced sorrow. The whole idea of "bleeding" tears is such a strong trait here because you personify oppressors such as Darkness, Life, Death, Night, Pain, etc...things that do not physically hurt us. The best part is the last stanza where you "choose to carry on". A lot of people can learn from this poem. Inspirational. I hope to read all your work soon