Reviews for Barging In
InuyashaLuver99 chapter 1 . 4/26/2004
Whoa, Whoa, Whoa. Way too much dialogue. Almost all the story is dialogue. Ask yourself this:
What about the characters?
What do they look like?
What are they like?
Where does this take place? Discribe it more.
You need more action in this story. It was an ok start, but if you add more action and discription it will definitly be yours.
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