Well done.

All in all - it was a wonderful fic!

Oh no... I thought the story is more about her.. not about the dramatic love life of Fenix!

Mira

Wow, I really like your story!

The setting is very interesting!

Mira

I read your story last year and I recently made an account, so this review is a year late. Sorry for that. I don't know if you're still here because you said 'you were done with fp' I just wanted to say that you have an amazing vocabulary, your setting descriptions and analogies blow me away and your characters are really fleshed out. This story has a well-developed plot and honestly, it's just 23 chapters of awesomeness.

("I just – need to make myself hurt." Though she'd already been looking at him, he got the feeing that she had only started to see him now. Shadows of fear still swelled and danced just under the surface of her eyes, distorting her expression. "Not always in order to feel.") This line totally displays your awesome characters, amazing writing style and awesome descriptions. Th only thing I didn't get (and that's probably my fault because I didn't read carefully)is that some things aren't clear about Aiur's past and it's really difficult to understand how Aiur is feeling throughout the story. I always wonder why she acts the way she does and sometimes the things she does catch me off-guard and I think...what would make her do that? I can never really answer that question. I know this doesn't make sense(I'm not as eloquent as you) but it feels like most of her feelings are just what the reader wants them to be until closer to the end when we start to figure it out and more is explained. Then everything you thought about her is irrelevant and it's like you never knew her at all.

You write beautifully, it's raw, the emotions are portrayed with every word you write. All 175,713 of them. You're amazing ! Happy writing! :D

Oh wow. Came to this story a few days ago but was hesitant to read it due to the fact that i knew the story will not have the typical happy ending based on the reviews written here.

Finished reading it a few minutes ago and what can i say? It was indeed one of the best stories I have read even though the last part was really heartbreaking. Though I would not end it in any other way.

So many emotions run through me while reading this work and you have the uncanny ability with words to bring the readers on edge for every chapter.

It was an absolute pleasure reading this story. Well done!

-naaf89

I do not know what to say. I am speechless. This story is the best story I have ever read,I mean i cried at the end for Aiur and Fanix, a little disappointed that it ended this way but it was beautiful and sad at the same time. I may not know you but one i know about you is that you have a beautiful gift. a gift that makes your readers fall into a beautiful imagination, a world you created through your characters. all i can say is do not let go of this gift, i want you to cherish it and make it grow into a magnificent reality.

This was amazing. The ending totally blew me away- because I would never be brave enough to do that to one of my own characters. But it was the best way to end this, I think, no matter that I wish for a happy ending for the two of them.

Your characters have astounding depth, as well as the world you created being amazing. Your writing is absolutely gorgeous, with few typos that I noticed. Please continue writing!

Love from,

Charlie

I haven't a clue why I haven't come across this story before, but I'm glad I did now. Your story is absolutely fantastic. Honestly. Never stop writing. The characters were realistic- I love how you portrayed them so and how you displayed their emotions across.

And I just loved the ending. Granted, I wasn't exactly expecting it, but it was just..beautiful. Yet bittersweet. (Does that make sense?)

After this story- I can't wait to read your other pieces!

Cheers : )

WOW.. this story was just amazing. I couldn't stop reading it! I loved the ending, it suited the story perfectly. The character portrayals were beautiful and they were able to deliver all the right emotions. I think you write amazingly well. My only question is why haven't you published this story yet?

Good job! This is definitely one of my favorites in fictionpress.

Jaliy!~

oh my gosh! you should be a director! the way you describe things and make connections by stringing together seemingly meaningless and unrelated things until they make perfect sense as if they've always been together is really amazing. i thing if you were directing movies you could be one of the best! the way you write i can see the scenes play out in my mind clearly. imagine just how amazing it would be if you had actors and actresses as well, it would be taking things to the next level. i think that Dark Hunter would make an Amazing movie!

-sammi (fanfiction name: . .star) let me know when you become famous!

Aw Aiur is still like the kid that lost her parents.

Okay! to be totally honest I wasn't going to review (I know, I know, I'm sorry! but when I went to check out your reviews, I was so entirely PISSED at a certain 'anon' douche-bag, booger, turd-face, ass-wipe, armpit, mother fu...

...well, you get the picture.

People get pissed when they don't get their ending and that total bull they said :

'yea this is crap - make me a different ending blah blah blah)

except in 'mature' text to make them look like that actually know shit...which they don't... was awful.

(I had a bad day, can you tell?)

It was a beautiful ending. Emotional and heart twisting. Bittersweet and AWESOME. Most believable chemistry I've seen in a while.

-

Yes, it has occured to me that this may not be an appropriate review.

..unfortunately right now i don't care.

Point is your awesome amazing yadda yadda yadda

they're a turdaface

you : sensational

them : armpit

you : hawt stuff

them : booger

Yeah?

So don't feel sad! Get mad!

...

Okay don't listen to me... bad day remember?

The ending was rather sad/ dissappointing

- i was expecting a happy ending

It also made the earlier (well-developed) chapters on Anthony/Fenix's family seem redudant because they were not

further developed in the subsequent chapters

Nontheless, I would enjoy an alternative ending/sequel if possible

Beautiful.

-sigh- She's just a chuck load of brilliancy isn't she?