I've heard of cases where people would feel sympathetic towards their attacker... but this is really confusing. For someone who was trained not to show weakness she sure as heck is showing a lot of it.

Unpredictable yet curious.

I forgot to point out this typo when I was reviewing the previous chapter:'Her face was almost touching hers, but he wasn’t looking at her.' - His face?

A kind of sad chapter... still confusing... It doesn't make sense that there would be such interaction.

So more background information... hmm... still cloudy and unclear though... but interesting.

I hope that they'll at least think Jenny's drugged and not really dead. I find it strange that Storm would show herself. Wouldn't she rather have kept it unknown to Fenrix? Anyway, good chapter. This story is keeping my out of my uni assignments :-S

Oh yes, definitely saw this one coming... but now I'm more confused than ever as to how she reacts... oh well... reading will probably tell more.

Interesting chapter. Jenny was definitely a comic to behold. Really well written. She plays the role of half-annoying sister perfectly. A lot of things revealed by Storm... seems slightly out of character. (would she reveal so much to a stranger). still... Maybe with the connection to her past it would make sense for her to do so.

One can definitely see that you like writing 'Storm'. I like the fact that she's being revealed more now to the reader. One can understand her slightly better now.

Two corrections:

'The small in this place was terrible' - smell

'The only reason he remembered her was because her grace and beauty seemed to stick in his mind; her image her burned itself into his memory somehow.' - The last bit of the sentence is slightly unclear... too many 'her' in there.

I quite enjoyed this chapter... It was very noble of Fenrix to have done what he did.

I found one typo:'The kind of man you excepted to find in side alleys late at night' - expected

Just an odd thought coming to mind. If she doesn't usually speak.. how would he know what's the usual? Yeah... completely off topic, but still... curious.

I like what I'm reading so far.

Slightly confusing... but I figure I'll understand the more I read on. The thing that confuses me is the fact that the hunter doesn't kill anyone, yet both she shot are left without a pulse... *reads on*

Very intriguing first chapter. There is so much to take in and ponder on. I especially liked the paragraph you wrote which kind of gave definition to the term "life". That was really well written. It turned out to be such a dark piece in the end. (but with 'dark' in the title, I should've known). I'm a little sensitive (more like cowardly) towards pieces that deal with self mutilation and blood and such (for personal reasons), so I'll be careful to read the rest of this work... if it follows the same trend as the first part then I'll probably not continue reading it.

Still... I hope that, while you are pulling away from FictionPress, that you do not pull away from your writing. Clearly you are very talented and also capture the attention of many readers. Just looking at the amount (and contents) of reviews you've received confirms it.

Hope the studies turn out alright. They tend to make life quite hectic.

Be blessed

...well, I feel forlorn now. Darling, I can honestly say that from just reading your profile and then the author note at the beginning of this chapter, I was dissuaded from the writing. I personally hate shorthand, because people who use it are more often than not really dumb. However, your cousin Steff recommended your stories to me, so here I am. :D And really, after I actually read your writing I realized how deceiving your author note was.

The first person thought flow was wonderful. Very descriptive, no grammar mistakes that jumped out, no painfully long sentences. It was just lovely. I will definitely probe this story later when I have more time. :D

(As a side note, I don't think you should give up writing on this site. If the pressures of this particular account get to you, create another one so that your reviewers won't pressure you for updates. With skill like yours, you should definitely think about pursuing a writing career. Perhaps a novel? :P Well, up to you.) Wow, longest dumbest bracket thought ever. Anyways, good opening. I'll read more later. Tahs!

Hey! Wow, I haven't reviewed this story in forever. I love the latest chapters. You do an awesome job at keeping your characters in character. I suck at that. Anyways, apparently you are like taking a break in writing or some other odd thing. I've yet to read the progress thing in your bio. I wanted to review first. I felt bad for missing the last 2 chapters and never reviewing, ya know? Anyways, I'm sure I'm boring you, so I'll go check out your profile now...satisfied and kinda tired, Lyn

...even though you said not to review...

...I'm gonna say hi...

...and...I'm glad you had fun...I love you, too...I guess...

...you're cool...and...I'll see ya later, I guess...