Reviews for Dark Hunter
KaronePrincess chapter 22 . 11/5/2007
Hello Aiur,

no...don't say that. I still and will remember your story. I remember the reading the last chapter and wondering will they make it to the place(sorry I forgot the place's name). I'm still excited to read the next chapter. I really anxious to find what will happen and what going on between them. It's very emotional and descriptive. I love reading your story. Please do continue post the story. The story is good. I really feel sorry for her and him too.

Thanks for letting me know. I'm reading the story and definitely leave comment to you. ended already but thanks for updating the story.

Thanks alot,

Morgan Davis chapter 23 . 11/5/2007
I was so incredibly sad that Fenix lost her. She had to die yet still there was this burning hope in me that somehow Fenix would still be with her. It was beautiful though! Utterly Beautiful! I stayed with this story originally because of your awesome descriptions but then the story and empathy for Aiur kept me captive. You drew the guilt and pain perfectly, like art work. The symbology also keeps my mind rolling with the possibilities.

In my literature class we talked about the difference between fiction and literature; one of those differences is that in literature no matter how many times you read it you always get some thing out of it, and each time it means more and more. Your book here is a piece of literature my friend. Once more I will say that i enjoyed following this as you pieced it together and created Aiur and Fenix; they are almost real people to me.

there is one thing that has been bothering me though... how on earth do you pronounce her name. Aiur? any clue would be great, since i've been clueless for a while now.

Also, i hope you write more stuff on here. You are truly talented and I enjoy reading just about everything you post, minus the reviewer responses to everyone but myself. Just know that I will be here incase you choose to start another journey.

I'm really glad I was able to read and be a part of this with you. Keep on affecting lives.
LondonLi chapter 23 . 11/4/2007
This story was increadibly sad, but I am so glad you finished it, even if I didn't like the ending. I always want love to triumph and save the day, or the person, and really want a happy ending! However, you did a beautiful job writing the plot and the characters. I'm not sure where a sequel would go from this, but I vote for a type of reincarnation fic, with a chance for a clean slate. Great work, your writing is wonderful.
Sweet.Incentive chapter 23 . 11/4/2007
(Formerly Writeress).




I can't . . . I can't even begin to say anything coherent yet. I was literally hanging onto everyword,it was written so beautifully and ahh . . . I can't believe she killed herself! And I NEVER saw Felix being the one to give her permission , ever. Gahh. It feels like a huge hole in my stomach because she had to die, even though I knew she would. But there was that tiny, way-too-hopeful part of me that was just wishing that somehow, they could have stayed together. Sigh.

I have to come back later when the shock has worn off and write a better review. But just ... wow.
liz chapter 23 . 11/4/2007
Oh my God. That was my reaction when I found this updated. I just happened to check, and you'd updated! I'm going to review as I go along, because I have the feeling this will be a long one (forty pages?). It has been so long. But I am so glad you've returned to finish this. I hope whatever happened to you is better now. Your notes are really good. Have I told you that before? Lately, with the most recent ones, I can really hear your voice. It's so real. Of course you're real, but I don't know how to say it. "& i don’t believe it’s possible to let go of something completely. so. i’m laying this down now, but – if it settles, it won’t be for a long time. but maybe that’s okay. maybe that’s okay." That made me pause. And then this: "i think some scars are meant to stay." Really good.

Okay. Wow. My hands are shaking. I'm so eager/nervous to read this. The title is really beautiful. Version 6.11? You are SUCH a compulsive rewriter. LOL.

Ah! I tried to find a nice line to gush over at the beginning, but they're all so gorgeous! "He wondered if it was always like this, when you counted your life down to the hours, the minutes. When you measured it against one thing. One person."

Like I've told you before, one thing that sets you apart from other writers is the way you somehow manage to convey tone. Your sentences are structured a certain way. Every punctuation mark is there for a reason. I know you spend a very long time on that. The line with the mirror in the sky is great. I think you've used it befre? In a poem?

We're just hit with Fenix for so long. His thoughts and nothing else happening. The way you've crafted him here is beautiful. It makes us feel along with him. He's getting tired. No! Please let him hang on. He's so strong in his own way. Stubborn, LOL. "He was in love with her, damn it. There was no use trying to run from that. The guilt, the regret – he’d never get over it. Over her." Aww! Oh, Fenix. This is so full of trepidation. The end isn't going to be happy, you told us. And so I'm kind of expecting tragedy but I'm still in denial over it. Oh my God. This is amazing, Kait. "He couldn’t follow her if she did that. He knew that. That hurt him, but what scared him was he thought he might still try."

Sitting down at knife-point. That is interesting. It makes me think she isn't going to hurt him (which of course she isn't because he is FENIX). Sorry. I got caught up in reading. Your word choice is stunning. I'm in love with this chapter already. You write inaction very well, Kait. "I dare you." Fenix is brilliant. But oh, I'm scared for him. "One look, her eyes in pieces, and he simply blew apart. In slow motion." This is another example of your incredible sentence construction. Adding "In slow motion" punctuates it. Wow. ""For what?" she whispered, and the sheer hopelessness in her voice shook him to his core." Oh no, oh no, oh no. She's so close to giving up. The previous chapter was so focused on her reactions to him that it covered just how close she was getting to the edge. You're making your readers feel along with Fenix. I don't want Aiur to let go but I know she's going to. We're pulled right into the story. I love this. This entire story is so intense and emotion and this chapter feels like the climax of everything. This is the end. Oh my God. I don't want this to be over. I'm tempted to stop reading here so this doesn't end. But I can't stop reading.

Haha, I love the way the situation is so serious and Aiur touches him or something and he gets all giddy. It's so cute. "He’d spend a lifetime apologizing for it, if she let him. A lifetime." He doesn't HAVE a lifetime. But the fact that he would say that shows how hard he's fallen for her. Jealous of a knife. LOL. Fenix is great. Oh my God. I keep saying that but oh my God. The way he says he'll give up what he believes, when from the beginning we know he CAN'T. Fuck. It's true. He can't do that. He's so desperate. And Aiur's reaction surprised me too but she's right. Haha, she totally feels something for him. I'm reluctant to call it love because I'm not sure if she can love. She's just a little girl. But we know she loves him. Or I can pretend she does.

The part where he basically tells her he loves her (why doesn't he just come out and SAY that he does?) made my eyes water. It's so romantic! "You tear me apart and put me back together, and somehow I’m more complete after." How can she listen to him and NOT melt? Ahah! She's affected. Oh damn. This is so sad. If I ever fall in love with someone I am quoting you. Amazing, amazing writing. And you say you can't write romance. This is unbelievable. She HAS to stay with him now. She tells him to stop? No! She needs to stay with him. He can protect her.

“If you can’t believe in yourself,” he told her, seriously, “I’ll do it for you.” Holy shit.

Noo! I've never been so consumed by your work, and your work ALWAYS pulls me in. I'm hanging on to every word. Damn, Aiur IS right. She doesn't want him to fight for her. In a way that shows how much she cares for him. She won't let him deny himself for her. "Aiur sighed. “Being with you – is the closest to life I have ever been." See? She loves him. Why can't she stay with him? I'm just complaining. I know she can't. You have made this so realistic. This wouldn't work any other way. But I hate you for it. He gives her back the knife like he gave her the Torrake except he's giving her permission to commit suicide basically and oh my God. I'm too numb to cry. If this was Aiur's point-of-view I'm sure I'd be bawling at this point. No one should have to die alone. Wow. "He looked into her eyes. They were the expanse of the cosmos, the dark spaces in-between the stars. And he couldn’t fly." That is so bittersweet. It fits the mood of this so well. You placed it perfectly. Oh my God. Damn I was right. She killed herself. You. Let. Her. Die. Oh my God. I cried at Aiur's point-of-view. It's just so beautiful and heartbreaking. The flashback to the little girl and the moonlight did it for me. She needs to be at peace but he's not there. In the end, she finds peace. So you DID give us a happy ending. It's just not completely happy. But it's so real. I really admire how realistic this is. You don't try to find a way to keep them together because truth is they can't be together. They live in two different worlds.

I don't know if I want there to be an epilogue. I feel there isn't full closure but maybe it's better that way? This end leaves you with such a punch in the stomach.

This is the most amazing fic. Yes, the beginning is like a completely different story. But you found your stride. You grew so much as a writer through this. Seven years. I wish you the best of luck rewriting this and I deeply hope you will persue publishing it. I'll read this over and over again until you do. I love the ending, despite how sad it is. You did the only thing you could do. Thank you so much, for opening yourself to us. I can see myself in so much of it. I think along the way it became a part of me. It's that powerful. Thank you again. You are truly, truly gifted. Never stop writing. Ever.

LeenaAmara chapter 23 . 11/4/2007
Somehow I knew he would be there when she died...or visa versa. It's a good ending, I think you made the right choice. It really shows how far the characters have come. That's one of the things that classify 'good literature' to me (you know, on all the english exams it's always the last question) that you can see the change from beginning to end, feel it, understand it.

It's been a while since you updated, but I understand, and of COURSE I read the last chapter! I always finish a story -unless I start it and hate it more then anything, which is rare- no matter how long the wait. Yes, sometimes it's hard to remember what has happened, but never in your stories.

You'll always be one of my favorite authors.

~Leena Amara
Mean titan chapter 1 . 7/28/2007
I'm sort of confuzzled but it seems like a good story.
atreyu love chapter 1 . 7/17/2007
sounds interesting
Writeress chapter 22 . 7/3/2007

Do NOT end here! This story is much too good for you to end it with so many loose ends. And I just love the interaction between Aiur and Fenix is just the sweetest thing lol. But seriously, crawl out of whatever hole you have been living in and update update update! And sequels wouldn't hurt either ;].
serendipity90 chapter 4 . 6/26/2007
v nice
chepchumba chapter 22 . 5/4/2007
Dark hunter is a lovely story but it desparately needs a sqeul, There are too many strings left untied and to much of the past that hasn't been revisited, otherwise it is a very good story. keep it up, if you decide to write a sequel let me know

dawn's unforgiving darkness chapter 7 . 4/13/2007
this reminds me of the adventures of buzz lighter series when an assasin is hired by the bad guy(forgot his name) and it turns out to be the girl's first love
D. Pointe chapter 22 . 3/30/2007
ok, its time you upload more chapters, b/c you can't just leave me hanging like this. God, it is so good: the way you develop your characters, and especially aiur. Come on, you need to hold on, and keep on writing this story.
Huggleskitty chapter 22 . 3/28/2007
I need more! and I still love you! *huggles*
Simple Thoughts chapter 22 . 3/7/2007
please update! this is a wonderful story and only needs about one more chapter before you would be done. Keep up the good work and update soon!
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