that was a very powerful beginning. it's detail, yet mystery of it was very enticing and well written. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Good introduction...I've always wanted to cut but I'd get beat down if I tried. :(

an emailed update on this one too plez! yep u were ryte... it IS darker. anyway, ur prologue sparked my curiosity... u can satisfy it by UPDATING SOON!
-THE RANDOM CRITIC-
i got the curiousity thingy from ur prologue... mwahaha... :-P

*thumbs up*

o kool! that...dude...that was just sad.. *sniffle. man this is definitely something different- i dunno, theres just something that gives this story a good twist and kick. in other words, i like it! ah, you're an amazing writer...like being able to express something like that into words...man...*seriouzly blown away*.yep, well i cant wait for ur next update, so make sure u do it soon!
-punkkid

i like! waiting for the next chapter!

Very, very deep. I had to read many parts twice to get its meaning, though I'm sure there are things so deep within that I will never be able to get, no matter how many times I can read it.
So much pain! Life, is meant to be enjoyed. It was meant to be happy. GOD wants you to be happy, he likes to see you smile. Yes, it is true that we are not to grow too comfortable with the world around us, yes, this is not where we belong, but (in my humble opinion) you have taken that a bit far...
It's a story I know, but I can't get over the fact that it reflects moments of your life, as you have described, so well. The darkness...The darkness CAN be overcome. Not by yourself, no, you can never do it alone. But it CAN be overcome, and you WILL once again emerge pure and untainted.
Yes, I do recognize the last part of it. And I still shuddered, as I have when Richardson read it out. Such torture...When I read things like these, I create vivid mental pictures. Still. I guess I can only take a small part in suffering superficially with you...

Oh wow. That was beautifully written. Please do continue!

it's a really good start, i can't wait to see where your going with this, right now i am rather confused...

powerful. that was really powerful. your descriptions were stunning. enough to give a picture.. but not so much as to get... boring i guess. (i was going to use a different word but i can't think of it right now) it was a really great beginning. i'm REALLY looking forward to what this story is about. i've always enjoyed both the protectors, and now i can enjoy this one too. wonderful. you're great. really really good at writing.
-Amy

“Life” is a word that is used far too loosely. I see that so clearly now, but I never thought of it before. For me, life is the wind blowing through the heavens. It is the heartbeat of the world pulsing through your veins. It is one of the central cores of humanity that connects us all. It is something everyone comes in contact with, but no one is the soft strains of the music of each breath you take. It is the innocent laughter of a child. It is the foundation of nature. It is the spaces between the stars in the night skies, where there is no end or beginning. It is the inner glow in the face of someone who loves you when they look at you and the unguarded shining in the trusting soul of belief.-
That was marvellous! I commend you on a job well done! I say this every time but it's so true...this doesn't seem like the same author. You're becoming/growing into your talent more and it's awesome. You have really grown with ur writing over the past...year/months...awesome, awesome job, I mean it.
The ending was great as well.
I need them. They remind me that I am still alive.
I forget that a lot, you see.
Great work! I def, CANNOT wait to read MORE!
~HeartandSoul
Thanks so much for reading Beautiful...and yes u inspired it...in a good way that is. LOL!

This is beautifully written. All your description, the emergence of the angst element making u wonder why the character is doing all this to herself... i can't suggest or criticize coz there really is nothing to criticize! anyway, plz keep going with this!

YAY! NEW STORY! hehe, and it looks like a great one! The beginning was sad. Have you ever read a book called Cut? That's what it kinda reminded me of. Very good, you write the feelings of this character beautifully. Please update, can't wait!