It was beautiful. It was so heartbreaking, emotional, truthful, and romantic! Loved it :)

Yeah finally My Willie-Holly or Wollie is together! I love you 3 ~

Jeezzz Willie & Holly u guys make me cry alot. . .I feel hurt seeing how u two are such a big mess. .but at end best friends and love showed its power. .Stay happy forever. .Willie dont run to others girls. .srsly u keeping playing . . Holly never ever push ur willie.. .I love love love this story alot !

I loved this Chapter! It was so sweet. Holly needs to realize that Will isn't happy with Vic, if he's happier with someone else (her) then that means he's unhappy with Victoria and that Victoria will also be unhappy. Will also needs to let Vic go, even if he and Holly don't end up together. I think he should say he doesn't feel more for her. He should do it for himself and her.

I'm loving this Story! The Characters are interesting, and the Story Plot is also amazing! :)

AW. Cute! This Story seems like it could be good :)

I really liked your characters. They may have been slightly unreasonable at times, but they were all good at heart. This ending was pretty good. Overall, I think you did a really good job with this.

Riley's actually a pretty cool character. I can't believe she'd just let go of Will like that. This chapter was all right.

That was unexpected, but I'm glad Vic finally stopped ignoring Holly. There was a verb tense error, but I don't think it's that big of a deal. Like you said, this is basically a rough draft. It's still pretty good, though.

Personally, I can understand Holly, but I think she still should have told Vic before she got too invested in her relationship with Will. I don't think this chapter had very many mistakes.

Was Will drunk during his phone call with Holly? So, like I mentioned before, it's probably best to keep the flashbacks out of bolded letters, but this chapter was really good otherwise.

I think this chapter was heavy with drama, but at least you were broadening your horizons and trying something new. I noticed you misspelled "angel" as "angle."

I'm not entirely sure how to write a kiss, either. I really liked this chapter. Of course, there was a lot of drama, but I don't think you overdid it with a bunch of screaming or anything like that.

That escalated quickly. This chapter was written very well. Good job.

You sure know how to end a chapter. I'm guessing "Wollie" is a combination of Willie and Holly. I didn't see very many mistakes in this chapter. This chapter was really good.