Sorry it took me awhile to get to this, but its great so far! I would possibly combine some sentences to make them less awkward, but otherwise its flawless! I can't wait for the next chapter or part or whatever it is! Wonderful job!~Rachel

Wow. Wow, wow,wow,wow,wow wowwy, wow.
How utterly heart wrenching. You have a mastery of words that would give even the the greatest poets and storytellers pause.
I don't wich story came first, but it makes for an interesting backstory to Vampiress that should be fleshed out and explored.
With every story I read you make me hungry, drooling for more.
I hearby procalaim to not anymore because I can't stand the wait for the next parts...
Ok I lied. Anything you write I read, again and again. You're an inspirtation even to me.
Don't stop.
Gavin Kingsley

Oh wow, beautifully discriptive. I don't really have much to say other then praise, and you don't *just* want praise...right? :D I'll give you praise anyways, whether you like it or not.
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The discriptions in the first paragraphes was great. I could feel like I was actaully there watching the scene play out infront of me.
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Maybe we could of done more if we had a bit more of a disciption of Jareth? I keep seeing him as a shadow in my mind. A shadow with blue eyes.
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It's sad that Joslyn couldn't be with Jareth. Vampire royalty, hmm...being royalty, mortal or not, must be tough. Especially in your story here.
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Now this...thing, where Jareth breaks it off with Joslyn. I think there's more happening then what meets the eye, don't you think? Of course you think , *you're* the authoress after all:P
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Anyways, great story, I would like to see you finish it, no pressure though, writing under pressure isn't fun.
Again, great job on the detail and slight mysterious edge.

Your story is very lovely, and yes, i think you should continue this.

2 lazy to log in. Anyway, i think u should update it! Totally!

Well, isnt this a sad story! *sniffles and wipes tears away* Speak of the devil! You aren't going to leave the story here are you! You evil authoress you! It should continue! NOW!

O_O This is..beautiful.
You'll be continuing this...soon...RIGHT? Please!

well... the description seems good, i guess it's sorta romance huh? good anyway, continue?