Reviews for In the Dark
marmon chapter 1 . 1/1/2005
B-man, Interesting, I like it. The way you built suspense and curiosity was great. Then your end leaves us in the suspense you created. Good work. I might suggest shortening the journey through the halls and adding details to the rooms. You know, less words can help build suspense.
Maykuu chapter 1 . 10/18/2004
Hmm.. I was compelled by the summery to read it. Not what I was expecting, but nice immigry...
slave to the voices chapter 1 . 4/28/2004
It's a good story, but I got a little lost with all the doors and stairs. I think with a little reworking you could make it a great story! Anyway, keep writing.
Dream and Write chapter 1 . 4/28/2004
Well done. Keep up the good storylines. I love the character interaction. This is very well done. I’d like to invite you to a writing forum. I hope you enjoy the community and share some of your interesting works.
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Aria-639 chapter 1 . 4/27/2004
Wo
spooky! Dude thats cool, keep it up
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(p.s. Er...Can you kinda check out my stories too? Alot of people don't like giving reviews or something _
Bai!)
IrishVampire13 chapter 1 . 4/27/2004
Not bad at all; that's a nice little chiller at the end. Good job. :)