Reviews for Truth
stephanie chapter 1 . 4/30/2004
interesting theory... I think as a weapon I would choose a spoon because, well.. Not sure. Spoons are rather amazing inventions tierd to think of any actual constructive crizitem. Other than you had some very interesting points there. Like the theme of love and hate. Often wonder about the theme... can one actually exist withouth the other? doubtfully... too much to actually go throuhg. Liked this piece though.
Formerly chapter 1 . 4/30/2004
It's reasonably well-written, but there are a few problems.
First, you use too many words. I mean, don't use five adjectives where one or two will suffice - it's a nice tool once in a while, but if done too much it gets boring.
Then there are a few odd sentences. For example, the one with the knife vs gun thing. It doesn't really make any sense.
Finally, the whole thing is sort of incoherent. You start with one thing, and end with something very strange. Possibly there's something connecting them, but the middle is greatly obscured by the purple prose.