|Reviews for Birth of a Legend|
| Mythstify chapter 2 . 5/6/2005
It's good so far, but a word of advice:
Okay, several words. You use the same description way too many times. I know you have a picture of each of these characters in your head. I can tell. But you keep on describing the characters when your readers already know what they look like. Jade eyes. Argent hair. Things like that. You don't need to keep telling the reader what the characters look like. It makes the story wordier than it needs to be. Long winded paragraphs are hard to stay interested in. But otherwise, I'm enjoying it! D
| woven-tapestries chapter 3 . 1/2/2005
Where the hell is the rest of it?
| JTM Aegis chapter 1 . 5/16/2004
This story has a lot of sentence fragments for descriptive purposes and a lot of run ons. My suggestion is to be more descriptive with fewer fragments and run-ons. Any one can break up sentences for "creative liscence". It takes a talented writer to be descriptive, entertaining and keep their sentences aesthetically pleasing. Keep writing...I will keep reading this highly entertaining piece. Could you please review my fantasy series? I created my own world as well. I just want another creator's opinion! Especially yours!
| Nomorewalkingthedog chapter 2 . 5/7/2004
Too lazy to sign in, sry
Anywhoo, great second chapter. You're an awesome writer, and i can't wait for the next chapter!
| K.A. Rosa chapter 1 . 5/2/2004
Wow. Awesome start to the story. I don't usually find many stories of this quality on FP. Can't wait for the next chapter!