Reviews for Untitled 2
Mastermound chapter 1 . 5/3/2004
wow... very different... I love how simplistic the verse is... there isn't much fluff to battle through... what your saying is right on the words.. you know... it's very urban... I love the cookie line...very easy to relate to because it's playing simplest of words and therefore the simplist of emotions... I love it... try throwing in more colorful adjectives... but stick with simply stated actions... your simple verbs are what gives the poem it's style.. I'll check up and see if your other poems use verbs similarly