|Reviews for The Funeral|
| Mandy chapter 1 . 3/27/2007
Very nice. The word pictures are beautiful. The emotion is very real and raw-easy to relate to. You have a supreme talent for stream of consciousness.
"Art" is my favorite; I didn't want it to end. Maybe it was the questions in the last three paragraphs in "Art", or something else, but those last three paragraphs seemed to zoom by for me a little too quickly. I think you could end that section with "I don’t really have anything black. The turtleneck, and that’s it." That sentence seemed to sum up his shallowness. Or, you could expand on the ideas in the last three paragraphs. I think the last sentence that you have right now in that section ("We can learn a lot...") is out of character for Art. He is a shallow person, and that is a pretty deep thought. Even as is, I like it very much.
| stext chapter 10 . 5/6/2004
| urban kitsch chapter 1 . 5/6/2004
I really like your analogies, especially the toast. Looking forward to more of your writing in the future.