Another striking piece; Again, I really fall into the visuals of the beginning, but this one carried me through strongly till the end. There are many gems of lines here - simply stunning.

wow o wow ! jesus that was amazing! i love the word obsidian by the way and iv no idea why! but anyways this is just simply amazing"! please write more please!
o and please review my story ;thoughts of eva. it wud mean alot to me! xx

You have some very powerful imagery here. It's wonderfully well written. Keep up the fantastic work!
~The One and Only

Very nice. I don't much like the incest, but the torture is hella sexy. This is just beautiful though. Fantastic job.

Guilt, why would they feel guilt? What did THEY do to become so guilty and feel the need to let the brother rule over them? Oh must have been something bad. Defiantly like the feeling of hopelessness at the beginning that switches as its revealed they're not quite as hopeless, just passive. Quite horrific. _ Me likey!
'You pushed me through the paper wall of love and hate long ago' yeah, you're thinking about them constantly whether you love or hate them. Quite a fascinating quirk of the human race you capture brilliantly in both of your poems. Congrats, love your work!

Oh,...*sigh* This is really good. i like the form, the meaning, hte word structure. It rocks. It's sort of saddening though. That's o.k. I write like this occasionally. Keep up the great job and write more cuz I'd like to read more poems of yours soon.
your Loyal reviewer,
jake
*sighs again*
bye.

Nice work. I love how suggestive it is-and yet how it doesn't quite admit what it's suggesting. Means different readers can take it different ways (something most beautiful poems do). Awesome job. Keep writing!

Oh! This poem reminds me of this freaky dream I had about my older brother a little while ago. He went off and killed all my friends then tried to hit on me. I really liked the line "You pushed me through the paper wall of love and hate long ago". It made me think of "there is a thin line between love and hate". It's really awesome -. Thanks for reveiwing Dusk To Dusk. Yeah a lot of people point out my grammar mistakes. It's kinda my weak point ;;. I'll try to work on it 'k? Thankies again,
Viv

I like it, its really dramatic and pretty scary. I didn't understand all of it, I think I would have to read it a few times to get it fully, but deffinatly good work!

Very nice poem, I like it. Don't think I'm a supporter of incest though,:p I think it's one of the grosest things in the world, but such subject do make good poems,(and good stories) most of the time, and you did it right. (thnx for reviewing mine, nice to hear you liked it .)

its very interting, and thnxs for the review

She is letting him rape (not really..) her because she feels shame.. Why is she shameful? What did she do in the past? I think the descriptions about how she felt and his emotions to her were great. Thanks for the review. Yea, I don't think that was my best poem.. This poem was awesome, though. Disturbing.. twisted.. what more could you ask for? )

Maybe not fair enough warning. I'd change the rating if I were you. Change it to PG, maybe. :D
Anyways, I love the use of the word "amnesty". Whenever I see that word it makes me happy, and I'm not sure why.
~midnight eyes