very good, it captures the saddness of dying alone. i like the word phrasing ~kyoko

This is very good. The phrasing is nice and it adds to the effect a little more. Description is awesome, and overall very good.

Ouch. This is a very sad poem. I think you did a good job on the tactile and emotional sensations. This reminds me of those sailors aboard the Russian submarine that coudn't get rescued in time.

wow.
empowering and suspensful.
i liked ALOT!
makes u shiver and feel for the people and the words you have written.
i liked the a/n, and the saying u included in it.