|Reviews for Forgotten|
| Citrine Sharp chapter 1 . 5/14/2004
Ya... its safe to say that... I can't spell at all.
*laughs* Don't worry either I'm not offended, hear corrections enough I've grown used to them. I agree with everything you've said though, just so you know.
The biggest reason I make those stupid mistakes is because I write them quickly... in 5-10 minutes spans.
| Ambvai chapter 1 . 5/11/2004
Good job- I certainly enjoyed it.
Not too much to say on the technical front, though I have a personal liking for the comma-period-comma-period style in quatrains.
A few typos/notes on word choice if you're not offended. (Of course, all can be explained away by stylistic decisions. ) )
I find that "Til" or "'til" usually looks better than "Till" in my opinion.
Line 9- Maybe a comma before "it" or remove the word "it"?
Line 11- Maybe a comma after "Still"?
Line 13- "hear" instead of "here" maybe?
Line 15- Pretty safe to say it's supposed to be "Ignored"?
Line 20- "you're" instead of "your"?
Sorry about the editing, but I found it an enjoyable poem and couldn't resist the slight patches. )
| Angelic Hellraiser chapter 1 . 5/11/2004
Exactly! I love it! Great job!