Another great story!

I thought at first that there would be some romance between Challen and the girl he is going to babysit, but then Gretchen was introduced.

I like her - she's a solid character. Good work. :)

I don't usually pay attention to tiny mistakes when reading (unless I'm someone's beta) because everyone has typos. However, I noticed in an earlier chapter, when the Grandma was talking, you wrote 'sweaty' instead of 'sweety'.

Kinda funny in contex, I thought, and something to fix when you feel like it.

Update soon! :)

-V.

this is a terrific story...i see that you haven't updated in a couple of months, but I hope you will soon. These are fascinating characters. Im curious to see how the babysitting thing will come out.

are you ever going to update? please do! i've been avidly watching to see if you update for a while now... im wiaitng! i love your stories so please keep writing them!

This is really a great start! please keep up writing... I've been waiting for updates on stuff for a while and I'm thrilled to see that you started this story. keep it up.
~Amy

Excellnet beginning, hope you'll continue soon!

Dude, I like you, I like your stories, UPDATE!

hey hun, I didn't know you were writing again! Why didn't you tell me? I missed out on this super awesome story. Not like your others aren't. But this one is NEWEST. You have some interesting and fun characters, and amazing dilogue. Kudos on a job well done. Check out some of my updates and new stuff if you get a chance, I miss hearing from you.
Gnat

im a bit confused but its a good story with a good plot line

I probably would have read this story if it weren't for the formatting. I would suggest putting blank lines between your paragraphs as it is easier to read on screen.

YOU'RE ALIVE! Woohoo! Alive and kicking and I could not be more happy about it! This story is very well written except, I'm slightly confused about this "Rebecca and Grandmother" Characters. It's either the girl he's supposed to meet for his little brother while he's off on the honey moon or i'm just bloody wrong. Well I'm SO GLAD you are back! Update soon! Cheers!

Hey! good chapter...although it lacked our prince charming I love so much. haha.
So I'm intrigued about why someone would be after her, or what her father did. And where is her dad now? I hope nothing bad happened to him. And where did the scars come from? Perhaps the encounter with the bad guys?
This chapter was really well written, because you made sure to describe everything- the moonlight, the smell of pine, the way the couch reminded her of cookies...it was perfect. Well done on that! :) And I loved the scene where the lady is planting sunflowers in the moonlight! how quaint, appealing...and just ...creative. It gives this story some sort of old fashioned feel.
I can't wait to see more of Challen either! (Prety please?) Oh, and i love the creative names you always use. No "Nick" or "bob" in your stories...hehe.
Anyway, if you get the chance, check out my latest, "a country christmas" your thoughts would be appreciated and highly regarded becasue I respect your work so much! :)
Panda/Mandy.

wow, now this is a darn intriguing start! I didn't read the sumary so I don't know what its about...but gosh I can't wait to find out where you are going with this.
And as always, I'm already madly in love with our leading man. YOu sure know how to make them hunky. Ugh, I sound like im 12!. Seriously though...6'7? I Could go for that, cus im 5'10. Yum. Ok, cant wait for an update! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE?

she's um quite an interesting character. well...she certainly knows how to take care of herself.
update asap