Reviews for In Two
Helen Williams chapter 1 . 6/20/2004
Great job in depicting a break up. Keep up the good work.
Well written
Fabian Cortez chapter 1 . 6/17/2004
Excellent, I love the way you describe this; so few words render such a powerful message.
Well Done
Keep Writing!
F.C
sheZadey chapter 1 . 5/24/2004
wow it reminds me of that perforated lines poem in a way, as the poem talks about smoothness and being separated- like paper. i like the contrast of textures between smooth and jagged.
Kaxanthedragon chapter 1 . 5/19/2004
Aw...
-Red
Terra Tigra chapter 1 . 5/19/2004
nice job. short but i think you keep it raw enough that it doesn't matter; no fluff in this poem. very bittersweet. Nice job with the free-verse as well. You really have that technique down. ;)
Arrivederci!
-Terra Tigra-
lisaslife chapter 1 . 5/18/2004
Sad and sweet too.
Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 5/18/2004
very thoughtful. i love your style!
LaTierraSutil chapter 1 . 5/17/2004
sounds like people growing apart... or better yet... two people... once apart, who thought they were closer, but realized they were still just... too different, as they faded apart even more. i dunno. i interpret stuff strangely. sounds like faded love, that wasn't really love to start... if that makes any sense at all. haha.
catseyeview chapter 1 . 5/17/2004
You must have been looking closely at notebook paper while writing these...I like the metaphor, smart and sweet at the same time. This is really a romantic piece.
ApplesCM chapter 1 . 5/17/2004
aww. I like. Nice job! :-)