Reviews for In My Mind
Larael chapter 1 . 5/18/2004
Oh no! I love the ending! This is a very thoughtful and deep poem; it's very good! You have a definite gift for writing about love!
avani.awakening chapter 1 . 5/18/2004
I think that rhyming works in some parts, but not in others. Try writing without an ABCB pattern. The first three lines of "But these things..." are excellent, but that last line of that stanza makes it sound like you were struggling to make it rhyme. Also, the ending was totally uncalled for. It brings to a kind of clunky stop and no one will wonder about it. As for the rest, I mostly liked it. Keep up the good work and don't end poems like that, please!
Trinity Joselyn Carter chapter 1 . 5/18/2004
ouch... that was really good!