Reviews for Heaven Can Wait
pinoy1 chapter 1 . 10/17/2009
Hello Jave Harron! It's me Bien from the Philippines! Sorry for the late comments, I was in the hospital for a few months because of my diabetes. Anyway, this is my most favorite of your collective works. My only gripe is the short chapters, next time try to write longer-sized chapters instead of your normal vignet sized installments. Also, do you think you will ever experiment writing a "sword and sorcery" style pulp story. Kind of like Michael's Culpug fics? Thanks!
Arkash chapter 28 . 6/18/2005
Finally I had time fo finish reading this.

I had expected a different ending, though it was good. your use of the weapons tech is superior. The plot could use some rewrites to make the characters more self reliant, rather than be manipulated by Iwan. I enjoyed reading this novel.

Thanks for sharing it with us. *_*
Arkash chapter 27 . 6/5/2005
It was a well planned and quick battle. Excellent use of tech, as always.

Good Job! *_
Arkash chapter 26 . 6/2/2005
Weapons galore! I like the Ecophagic nanobots, cool way to get rid of mobs. It sounds like something similar to my SAM.

Good job, as always! *_
Arkash chapter 25 . 6/2/2005
Yet another great chapter full of cool tech stuff. And you introduced a new character, Lazarus.

I like the technical creation of the 'phantom army'. I plan to use that in "Wrath", but with telepaths conjuring up the images.

Good Job, as always. *_
AaronTilmeran chapter 26 . 5/31/2005
Okay, cool chapter! I hope the battle will be big!
Arkash chapter 24 . 5/31/2005
This is a great chapter. The bastard deserved to die, though Willart is right that it was too fast for the likes of him.

Good inventive way to kill him.

I've been waiting for this. Good Job! *_
Arkash chapter 23 . 5/25/2005
Hehe, I didn't think it was possible for a woman to rape a man.

A good chapter all in all with interesting tech stuff.

Where does Ruckil get all his know how?

Good Job! *_
Arkash chapter 22 . 5/22/2005
As usual, great tech and weapons you have here. And more surprises from Iwan.

How did Ruckil become so twisted? Twisted is not adequate to describe him.

That was sick, sick, sick. Ruckil should die a thousands of deaths, and I hope in the end you will provide that.

Good work! *_
Arkash chapter 21 . 5/22/2005
Wow! This was a good use of illusory tactics. I had used something similar towards the end of "Quest"

But surely they can't be dead?

Cliffhanger, gosh, I love cliffhangers.

*_
Arkash chapter 20 . 5/22/2005
I'm waiting for the page to show up, but I guess this is it.
Alnitak Z Orionis chapter 19 . 5/18/2005
This is an utterly fascinating chapter!

So may mysteries explained.

Great job! *_
Arkash chapter 18 . 5/17/2005
Interesting chapter, and we learn some new tid bits.

I like the way the Order is run, the Matriarchal society, it reminds me of the Dune series, the Bene Geserit, a little.

Good Job *_
Arkash chapter 17 . 5/16/2005
Good chapter with lots of great tech, as always.

Kirsha is smarter than I had thought at first. When will Willart take over the plot? *_
Arkash chapter 16 . 5/14/2005
OK, another suspenseful chapter. You are a master of using military tech.

Most of your characters are strong, and I noted that you included a bit to show Willart had feelings. It's important for a main character.

But...I'm upto the 16th chapter, and I've been waiting to see when Willart would take over from the Benefactor/Overmind persona who seems to be driving the plot. It should be Willart who drives the plot forward. This way he seems to be manipulated. Just a thought I had to of my short stories had been rejected for that reason.
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