Hello Jave Harron! It's me Bien from the Philippines! Sorry for the late comments, I was in the hospital for a few months because of my diabetes. Anyway, this is my most favorite of your collective works. My only gripe is the short chapters, next time try to write longer-sized chapters instead of your normal vignet sized installments. Also, do you think you will ever experiment writing a "sword and sorcery" style pulp story. Kind of like Michael's Culpug fics? Thanks!

Finally I had time fo finish reading this.

I had expected a different ending, though it was good. your use of the weapons tech is superior. The plot could use some rewrites to make the characters more self reliant, rather than be manipulated by Iwan. I enjoyed reading this novel.

Thanks for sharing it with us. *_*

It was a well planned and quick battle. Excellent use of tech, as always.

Good Job! *_~

Weapons galore! I like the Ecophagic nanobots, cool way to get rid of mobs. It sounds like something similar to my SAM.

Good job, as always! *_~

Yet another great chapter full of cool tech stuff. And you introduced a new character, Lazarus.

I like the technical creation of the 'phantom army'. I plan to use that in "Wrath", but with telepaths conjuring up the images.

Good Job, as always. *_~

Okay, cool chapter! I hope the battle will be big!

This is a great chapter. The bastard deserved to die, though Willart is right that it was too fast for the likes of him.

Good inventive way to kill him.

I've been waiting for this. Good Job! *_~

Hehe, I didn't think it was possible for a woman to rape a man.

A good chapter all in all with interesting tech stuff.

Where does Ruckil get all his know how?

Good Job! *_~

As usual, great tech and weapons you have here. And more surprises from Iwan.

How did Ruckil become so twisted? Twisted is not adequate to describe him.

That was sick, sick, sick. Ruckil should die a thousands of deaths, and I hope in the end you will provide that.

Good work! *_~

Wow! This was a good use of illusory tactics. I had used something similar towards the end of "Quest"

But surely they can't be dead?

Cliffhanger, gosh, I love cliffhangers.

*_~

I'm waiting for the page to show up, but I guess this is it.

This is an utterly fascinating chapter!

So may mysteries explained.

Great job! *_~

Interesting chapter, and we learn some new tid bits.

I like the way the Order is run, the Matriarchal society, it reminds me of the Dune series, the Bene Geserit, a little.

Good Job *_~

Good chapter with lots of great tech, as always.

Kirsha is smarter than I had thought at first. When will Willart take over the plot? *_~

OK, another suspenseful chapter. You are a master of using military tech.

Most of your characters are strong, and I noted that you included a bit to show Willart had feelings. It's important for a main character.

But...I'm upto the 16th chapter, and I've been waiting to see when Willart would take over from the Benefactor/Overmind persona who seems to be driving the plot. It should be Willart who drives the plot forward. This way he seems to be manipulated. Just a thought I had to of my short stories had been rejected for that reason.