So, Jave. You are evil. You leave a cliffhanger like this.

Damn! What an action packed chapter! I loved it! So many nice, disturbing revelations. Ruckil is REALLY one SICK BASTARD WHO NEEDS TO BE TORTURED AND KILLED!

Let me tell you, Jave... Quite a surreal chapter you have here. This scene could make H. P. Lovecraft look like a Disney movie.

Lovely plan with Erin, although you've still got me waiting for the battle with the Leviathan. I'm getting very impatient for this!

I'm impressed with the last few chapters. They're getting longer and more interesting. Ruckil's a disturbing bastard, and so is Dublynd. I also like the child land mine dentinators. Keep writing, this is getting good!

Interesting revelations to be found here. The beginnings of a relationship between Willart and Kirsha? I suspected it from the beginning, but it's nice to see that there's been some time elapsed and we haven't been slapped in the face by the possibility. And the trap on Erin seems fairly devious. Too bad we don't get to see her decision until the next chapter, I'm guessing? Personally, and this may just be me speaking, I'd love to see her captured so that we can get into her mind and see what really makes her tick. She hasn't done much yet, and I think that a few character traits would add immensely to her. After all, Bressian didn't become so lovably loathed just by raping children!

Well, Willart certainly seems to be up a certain creek with this chapter! Lots of action, some disturbing revelations about Ruckil and Erin, and a full-scale battle waging? Definitely fun. I can't wait to see how Willart deals with the Leviathan, I've been waiting to see that beast in action since it was first mentioned.

His stun gun works as an electric razor... that's the coolest thing I've ever seen in a book.

~He Who Walks On All Fours

Okay, I finally got back to reading-seems you have a lot of reviews now!
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I loved this chapter, my new favorite! You did a good job of making it dread-filled, and tense.
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Only two things wrong:
1.) "Now, they were a bright crimson red." You should take out the red because it's repitative, just crimson is fine.
2.) "ECM. Electronic Countermeasures." Should be "EC" because it's two words and not three.
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My musings: only thing I can say is, wow! The AM must be really powerful-no wonder the bad guys want it. The ending was aninteresting cliffhanger. I look forward to see what happens next.
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Keep up the good work!

Ooh, quite the delicious action scene! So what was with all the apparitions on the Mata? Speaking of that, I think somewhere in there you confused the Stig and the Mata once. But it was a joy seeing Willart in some real action, and now that we've got him in a batch of trouble for the next chapter, this one promises to have an interesting resolution.

Hmm. Curiouser and curiouser.

Now just who is that voice, I wonder?

~He Who Walks On All Fours

Quite a creepy scene you got here... I won't spoil it for anyone reading the reviews, but I will say this was a great way to creep readers out and invoke a sense of awe and mystery.

Man, this chapter was great. Finally, some naval combat! Seeing ships blow each other up is always exciting, at least to a military buff like me.

review boxes haven't been working for me for some reason. Anyway, this chapter seemed exciting. Your descriptions of the ships and sky were excellent. Keep up the good work, Jave.

Interesting universe; very dark, and it has that transgenre feel that I like. I'll definitely be reading more of this.

~He Who Walks On All Fours