Awesome story!

Really great story!

I can't believe how people did not catch that this work is a PLAGIARISM OF JULIE GARWOOD's BOOK TITLED THE RANSOM!

I hope you get fucking sued.

AWE! Awesome! I love it!

awesome

As Derelict said a few years ago, your story is following very closely with julie garwood's ransom and a little of saving grace. just a bit more choppier and a smidge more butchered.

you have a typo in hte first sentence

Ashley sighed as the baron shouted his ordered.

but other than that its really good! if it wasnt in the first sentence it wouldnt matter at all )

lovely positively lovely! *gushes* hehehe, strong handsome scottish laird, every girls dream, well atleast my dream, lol, not sure about others. haha. just loved this, i read it before but im sure i haven't posted a review so that is being done in this, second read of the awsome story. this is going in my fav story list, see yha.

Alright, so this is a brilliant story! The plot is very well developed. It is long, but somehow seems a bit fast. Alot of time is covered, and that is okay. The romance is good, maybe if you decide to edit this, you can add a little more depth to it?

Another point, one that bothers me greatly, is this:

An example of your writing:

" “Warriors aren’t supposed to show fear.” Ashley whispered. "

Now, as a part of grammatical clarification, when you have someone say something you should wirte it as such:

" "Warriors aren't supposed to show fear," Ashley whispered."

or: "She did what?" he asked. or: "NO!" she screamed.

Notice the lowercase h and s after the quote...and the comma. When I first started writing, a reader left a review telling me about this and I didn't change it right away on my old work. She became very displeased and left a few more scathing reviews that really hurt...so I won't do that because I actually want my authors to like me! Because, how can I help you, or convince you to write more when you dislike me!

Another thing...this one is a bit difficult for me to explian...I noticed that this story was finished almost two years ago...I assume that your writing skill has changed in the past two years and maybe you don't need any of my criticism...but anyway, I'm here to give my opinion. Anyway, there are alot of times when your sentances seem a little, well, simple. The story is told with amazing passion, detail and imagery, but some of the action sentances seem a little droning...like: Tommy reached for her hand. Ashley took it. Instead of "Tommy reached for her hand and Ashley took it, a soft smile touching her lips..." or something of the sort.

So I hope that this does not hurt you in any way. You should know that I am only offering constructive criticism...I don't mean anything harsh or mean by saying it. I have tried to stress how much I like the story, its plot and the characters! I hope that I have not offended you...Got it?

I might add that I love reading about Highlanders...and writing about them! I loved this story!

~TZotel

I swear, I promised myself that I would review before I made it all the way to the end...well I'm not to the end yet, obviously...but I'm pretty close. Sorry about that...I got caught up.

Would you like some criticism?

(I probably won't wait for an answer...but I hope you know that I really do love this story!)

~Tzotel

Wonderful start. I really get the sense of how evil Rawson is...and how nice Ashley is!

~Tzotel

cant wait for the next one!

Thank you for the long-awaited update! Yes, a bit corny, but today corny was just what I needed. Anyway, thank you. Your story is the only one that kept me reading in the multitude of stories on fiction press. To make it better, you could add even more period information, research more of the lifestyle during that time, and add more of those sort of details, but it was pretty darn good.

There, you happy, I read your damn story...now finish Beautiful Nights

(Ps, I enjoyed this one, it kept me busy at work tonight too :) )

Great story! I love cliche's lol.