Great story! I've really enjoyed reading this over the past couple of weeks!

Wow, this is beautiful and epic, thank you!

Wow, that's bad news, more reasons to avenge her family then.

Timon might see the ambassador's ring and suspect Lena of treason.

I like this revenge plot. Thanks.

Half way done, this is great, thanks!

I'm guessing this is the prince.

Wow, this is a great start, thank you!

Alcaeus is such a dick and needs to not

I like this ending. But maybe you could've written an epilogue about Timon only. The way he said that he would comeback for Lena and how he thought about it, it just leaves the reader thinking too. I also prefer that he doesn't come back because that would mean even more conflict and angst but it just makes me want to read till that point of Timon's life when he finally accepts that he won't be coming back.

You need to learn the difference between then and than. It will serve you well in life.

I must say, I'm actually pretty glad there was no 'happy ending'. That ending is too cliche and wouldn't add up, especially to a story like this. I mean, she spends part of her life hating him, so why would she ride of into the sunset with him? The ending was very good, and I enjoyed the whole story very much.

-PT (mobile)

LOVED! Only a few things, I would have loved to hear more of the traitorous plotting, or of her giving the Ambassador news and details for the attack or some-such. Also I hear what you were saying about Epilogue and almost totally agree. On my part I would have loved to hear about her brother getting the throne (as was the bargain between Lena and the Ambassador if it was kept,) Maybe adding a twist, like her being pregnant with Timon's child, since the time he laid with her and the time she married cute Philo, couldn't have been more then a few weeks. And it takes about a month to realize your pregnant, so no one, but maybe her, would realize. Maybe, after bearing a few children, having Philo fall ill, or die in an accident-so she would move in with her King Brother- so that when Timon comes back with his army and invades, there she is, his conquest! 3 But your story is still wonderful, and if left me open with these ideas, and my own ending for it, so it's practically perfect! LOVE LOVE LOVE! Thanks for sharing!

This story was amazing. I liked your writing style and also your plot. Even though the endong was kinda sad I think that was the best way you could end the story.

I know I shouldnt be nagging but maybe you'll write a sequel? Lena dies and Timon becomes king again. Timon finds his Lena's son/daughter and wants to make him/her the heir and stuff maybe? Heheh well thats just my imagination running wild I guess. Just shows how much of an effect this story had on me to keep me thinking about it...

First off, I just wanted to let you know that I loved this story. It was fantastically written, and I enjoyed it immensely. I just read your author's note, actually, and I wanted to let you know that I completely agree with you. I understand where the other readers are coming from, a happy ending is always nice, but it doesn't necessarily happen like that in real life, and I'm glad you represented that in this story. I look forward to reading other works you come up with!