|Reviews for The Castle in the Story (raw draft)|
| Amy Keeley chapter 1 . 8/14
Putting this here for others as well as OP: link and instructions can be found on my profile. Thanks for asking! Will add that info to the note. :)
| Mimzy chapter 1 . 8/12
So where can I find your website?
| samthevariablex chapter 66 . 5/9/2015
This story is better then some of the published books I have read. The whole story line was amazing! It's definitely my favorite story on fiction-press.
| Darc Greyhaven chapter 66 . 7/23/2014
This story is amazing... And I have to thank you for writing it... It is one of my new inspirations.
| Ren the Wolf chapter 4 . 8/13/2013
Okay, I almost forgot about this story. Good thing I wrote down the title. Hehe. So, uh, this was an interesting chapter. I'm glad Maple is better. :)
| Ren the Wolf chapter 3 . 5/22/2013
Great chapter. :)
| Ms.Julia chapter 66 . 9/18/2012
I loved this, and the way you ended it.. though I'd want to read more... is perfect. Fantastic job :)
| CrescentmoonOftheShootingStars chapter 22 . 3/18/2012
THE ORACLE IS DORIEL'S MOTHER?
And by the way, wasn't his recollection (the one that he actually went through with, accepted) technically an entire memory, because it wasn't split up or divided into thirds?
| witeaya chapter 66 . 12/3/2011
really enjoyed the read.
interesting plot and even more amazing ending.
| Xein of Nethling chapter 3 . 6/5/2009
this is good and interesting, and i would really love to read the rest but i don't have time so ill just CC the first 2 chapters
first though, just a word, you don't have to listen to my advice im only in 7th grade
also, I'm a really harsh reviewer-your story isn't nearly as bad as I make it sound
so... now for some CC... let's see...
okay some of the second chapter seems sort of boring like, okay, 'blah blah people are saying important stuff that i should probably bother to read but it doesn't sound that interesting so I'm not going to,' so just try and someone liven up the converstaions
you might want to add in a chapter before ch1 explaining the world in general at her time, or weave it into the story somehow because the first two chapters leave you wondering just about the world... like i dunno whether this is just me or not but it was sort of like 'what the heck is happening' when first maple's in a dirty city where she's a thief and then shes... well somewhere... and a ranger pops out of nowhere... that just was sort of strange...
and also, now you're not the only person to do this I probably do to, but in the first chapter Doriel sounds sort of like weird like he's just threatened maple and is then following her because he has a pledge and then when she kills the leader thief guy he's just like... well he's just nothing whatsoever...
there should probably be some shock like 'why did you just save me' or from maple 'who the heck are you and why did i just rescue you'... do you get what im saying? cause i don't know whether i did a very good job on explaining...
anyways, just because i chose to pick on this story don't think that I didn't like it, because i really did, and its awesome
keep it up
-Xein of Nethling
| madimae chapter 1 . 1/30/2009
Oh my godness, this book is absolutly amazing. I've just begun reading it and i'm in love. unfortunatly i cant take it to school with me so its going to take forever to read but if i had the time i would read the whole thing in one sitting. i am really hopin there is a sequel soon. love it, good job :)
| Sekugi chapter 4 . 6/6/2008
I love your writing style! It's so easy to read and follow, and it's incredibly smooth!
| NinjAlt chapter 66 . 6/2/2007
Hope to see more from the sequel. Interesting story. Would have liked to see Maple being more useful though.
| the flaming river chapter 66 . 12/28/2006
i LOVE this story! I feel like screaming! I was up until three am reading it and then i woke up at 7:30 to finish it. So cool!
| For What Its Worth chapter 66 . 9/15/2006
A sequel? Oh, I can hardly wait! This ending was indeed too abrupt.