Amazing! Fascinating! Disturbing! A wonderful combination! Keep it up!

Oh my gosh, Laura, I just love your story. It is so good! What exactly are the plans that Snake got? Or will I find out later? Keep updating. You can check out some of my stuff if you want. The stuff I write isn't really good. I just write whatever comes to mind. Some of the stuff doesn't make sense, but oh well. Good job on "Bring on the Rain"! I'am so proud of you!
*meg*

OMG this has 2 be 1 of my fave stories on fictionpress! can u email me when u update? it's . thanx! luv yr story!

OMG! i totally dont know what to say! This is such an exalent fic, i think this is really realistic too! a note: why dont you tell about this war that happened and why there so afraid? how were there friends killed? How old is ella? I want to hear more about these mysterius plans! we! lol, very very good laura! i just think that it might have been hard to write the part were helen died, it must have been really upsetting. Its so realistic, i cant wait for more, but could you please not make it any scarier? lol, i feel small and stupid now, but reading scary things is definatelly not a hobby of mine. I love this fic! keep rocking on!

I am SO glad you're posting this Laura! It has SO much potential for an awesome story... it already is an awesome story with just two chapters. I was going to just review off of last time I heard you read it to me and Jessie, but I read the first paragraph and (imagine this) was atatched and had to re-read the rest. This is a really wonderful story, Laura. When you first read it to us and when I read it just a few minutes ago I got chills throughout the whole thing. Wonderful.

Omg, this is so realistic! as if you lost a parent yourself and are writing what you feel. *sigh* you have the best story ideas! I compleatly love this chapter and how it takes no time for you to update! keep rocking hard!

Wonderful story, but all your stories are wonderful :) The first chapter was very intriguing, pulling me in right away. The emotions are translated into words very well. I look forward to reading more.

aww. that was so good laura! i really liked it! i couldn't help but feel sorry for her, i hope she'll be better in later chapters! this IS the most deep thing you've ever written! i love it so much! on the thing it says Angst/action/adventure. will you bring a little romance in it too? that would be really kool, remember that its only a suggestion. keep rocking hard!
-lucky charms

I only have one criticism in this chapter, which is actually odd for me because I can be pretty brutal on stories. When you say "...trying to drown out the rain, but it resists me..." maybe you should change 'resists' to 'ignores' or something similar, only because resist doesn't seem like the fitting word in that particular sentence. Otherwise, I think this is a wonderful start and I can't wait to read more.