i really liked this. it was strong and to the point. i like how you have the caps, it gives it a certain feel. good poem and thanks for the review!

will do! very effective poem, nice contrast of innocence and bloody rage, it has a nice feel to it, keep writing!

ps. avoiding the longer lines may be useful, they interrupt the flow of the poem! good luck

Compelling, but I also found it funny at the end when it said "SEE YOU IN HELL". I'm maniacal like that. Crazy, even?

wow... thats deep, I think any woman or person who is abused would understand the loss of time and complete understanding. My friend calls it tunnel vision. Very good

very powerful...good job...

It's generic and cliche.

I see nothing in this poem that makes it stand or shine brighter than anything else.

It's just a blah poem.

i wrote something like that once but mine sucked yours rocked.

You truly do have a talent for this.

wow... touching. it really is an awesome poem, and i apologize for not leaving a longer review, but i hav to leave the house in like five minutes and am pressed for time. anyways, great poem!