My eyes would pop and my gnashing teeth would crack, yet I would never be able to decipher the meaning of this poem. I always thought of that silly poem I read in grade five about a spilling milk or pizza something. Apparently, my english teacher tried to understand it's meaning and explaining it to the students in her point of view, but her comment of it made me want to laugh and crack at her face. I can just see the image of my teacher trying to decipher this and jumping off a cliff while pulling her hair in frustration. From the bits and pieces though, is this about you trying to get off the chains of time for they go so quickly when you don't want it to yet goes so slowly when you just want everything to end right away? Sorry, I'm a little bit dumb. But the conclusion is, I know for sure: This is Awesomeness. :D

Wow! That was really good!

I have one word: deep. Good one, yes.
Regards,
Diane.

Having trouble sleeping at night? If I can read metaphors correctly, it seems that either you cannot sleep, or you are jealous of the independence of Time, which I have experienced frequently. Of course, maybe I'm thinking about it too hard, and you are simply annoyed by the ticking of clocks. Either way, I think this poem is rather intriguing, and wish I knew more about it; but sadly, interpretation is all the fun in reading poems, seeing as how there can be any number of interpretations. I have read your other stories and think you are quite the writer in the complexity of your plots and the omniscience of the character's minds, plus the fact that your writing is very relatable. There is great talent in you, that's for certain, and I am in great anticipation of seeing more of your work in the future.
Until then,
Constance Contraire

thats a very good poem. your wish to stay free of passing time and freeze as you are in that instant is gripping..!

I didnt understand the meaning of your poem.

This is an interesting poem! I enjoyed it very much. I like your style in writing. It caught my attention, especially the title, very creative.

Good job! I hope to read more of your stories and especially your constructive poems )

Keep on writing!

Serendipity Ellis~

Great piece, I liked the oposites you used in the beginning. But, correct me if I'm wrong, it seems like it's about insomnia, though I'm not that good with poetry metaphors. Anyway, I liked it's rhythm and the way it goes. Wonderful work.

Great poem. Good luck with poetry and life. Have a wonderful day.

~Twilight Starr~

I love this poem! You have quite a nice flow going, but you break it once or twice with the word choice. Although it seems to work quite nicely, as if you meant it to be like that. It's great.

hmm... this is an interesting poem. I like the way you wrote it.

okok I admit it, I only read this to tell you to update Unfinished Business!I sorry.

I do like the way this poem is written tho...

I really like this. I'm a big fan of poetry in general. But wouldn't a more fitting title be Pause in Mortality?

I love all you stories and poems and stuff! they're all so good. Keep it up!

Woh! This is one of the best poems I've ever read. Woh.

A wonderul poem. I love the title :).