Reviews for The Window
kissedthecow chapter 1 . 1/8/2009
Very nicely done! :)
afoggylullaby chapter 1 . 2/15/2007
i like this
Athena's girl chapter 1 . 8/1/2004
I've felt like this once...
It hurt so much to be excluded, but I couldn't miss the show...
wonderful poem.
Neti chapter 1 . 7/31/2004
Wow it's truly wonderful :d
Another very good job
I love all yours poems, you're gifted in poetry ;)
grim-dreamer chapter 1 . 7/25/2004
Beautiful. Brilliant use of alliteration (but 'suggestive' in front of 'suggestions' isn't quite so necessary, I don't think), and the half-rhyme is soft and clever; appeals well to the sense of sight.
The Wayward Fox chapter 1 . 6/24/2004
not wanting to sound boring, but this is beautiful. It sounds like something that could easily be made into one of the more heartfelt and real rock songs out there. "I hear the faint music from inside" I love it!
Summerdazed chapter 1 . 6/18/2004
ahh...wonderful!
summerdazed
littleskinny chapter 1 . 6/7/2004
I have been there. Great poem. It creates the illusion like a mirage..and everything hangs in the balance...good write...Skinny
Fabian Cortez chapter 1 . 6/7/2004
Absolutely wonderful writing here!
I loved it.
VERY WELL DONE
KEEP WRITING!
F.C
silverdream139 chapter 1 . 6/6/2004
Watching from the outside, admiration through a closed window. I can completely relate to this. "Hide your tongue, lest my fantasy it disprove."...What a wonderful thing, to dream and be inspired by something unreachable, mysterious...something that was never meant to be yours. Beautiful all the way through.
-Arii ._o
P.S. Thanks so much for the reviews. I really, really appreciate the lovely feedback. It makes my day. :D:D
Seeker of the Way chapter 1 . 6/4/2004
Words that bring up wonderful imagry!
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But, a soul kept mysterious is just bait. Tall, handsome, dark ... especially dark. "In the absence of light, darkness prevails." The majority of women allow their minds to be fogged over by the mystery, only to find themselves too swiftly, too late, approaching the lethal craggy shoals. Then, come limping to me to lick your wounds, to keep your salty tears from aggrevating your wound. "O friend, I've done it again!" "There there," I return. "If only I could find a nice boy!" In my mind I scream, "HERE, HERE!" Instead I groan this out: "Is that him?" You sigh in a melted voice "Where where?" Go on, go on then! Go back to him or another shadow like him, chase your tale of misfortune forever if you must, I am not here to change your fate. Yours is yours, and mine is mine, will ever the twain meet?
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and ... END SCENE! *takes a bow* thank you, thank you ... aother random improvised moment - written especially for you, my friend. Hope this finds you well and in good spirits (joke here, when are you NOT is good spirits *cheesy grin*)! Get yahoo, I am on that more often! Missing you, John
CydCharisse chapter 1 . 6/4/2004
Ack, I wish I could give this a proper review, but all I can think of is your poem starts out the exact same way my poem, "It's not so bad," does.
Amethyst Horizon chapter 1 . 6/1/2004
i love it! it's different, not what you'd expect! wonderful work!
Aleonic Relic chapter 1 . 6/1/2004
well written, i thought it was great. the flow and transition had no flaws. good poem.
xXxskysthelimitxXx chapter 1 . 6/1/2004
wow...this is really good, very interesting. Can't wait for more.
*Sky*
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