Reviews for broken
do not resuscitate chapter 1 . 7/28/2004
that was a lovely little haiku. i liked how you used the word ugliness instead of evil or bad. the poem flows nicely. great job.
Franken chapter 1 . 6/10/2004
What do you mean by "Ugliness" is my question. If you mean like crime, violence, war and stuff like that, then go you! but it sounds like an inferiority Haiku. At least that's what it comes across as to me. Anyways, only you would know of course, cause you wrote it! Good job!


P.S. Oh yeah, the Haiku here are all "Americanized". A true Haiku can only be written in Japanese.
FAKEromances chapter 1 . 6/10/2004
i like. i like very much.
SeaVoi chapter 1 . 6/9/2004
I don't know if I care for the setup of the "writing" but I do like what you are talking about, maybe you should try to seperate you thoughts from everyline, so its not so poemish, don't hate me. I just giving you something people have told me before, and it does help. :) Keep writing.
frugale chapter 1 . 6/9/2004
You're maybe the first one who acknowledges that the 5-7-7 form is 'hip', 'modernized' and 'americanized'.
I liked the message.