Great chappy!

This is a really great story, although it's really sad. But I really love it!

Okay so... I don't know why it's bothering me as much as it is, but I figured I'd point it out so it can get the frack out of my brain: when you do the waltz (or any other [international] standard dance (i.e.- Waltz, Tango, Foxtrot, Quickstep) for that matter), the women (follower) do look over the gentleman's shoulder (leader). If there is contact the whole time, the leader can't watch where he's going, now can he? :D

And that the standard dances are the ones where you keep lower body contact. Latin dances are the dances that are led through contact through the arms (tension and whatnot. I was happy when she realized space was needed... XD) until you get into higher levels and start choreographing them accordingly. Or whatever. :)

But besides that (as a ballroom dancer, that was bothering me way too much. :]), I like this story so far! :D I shall keep reading!

hm, you have a really good story here. wrong ending though...very wrong...i think you needed to go a bit farther into the future with it, and maybe put a bit more into it. i can understand that you're kinda dead with it though but still...its a bad place to leave your readers...anyway, as i said, it was really good, up until the last few updates.

MBA

Oh yeah, for the last chapter, you spelt Bondi wrong, it's Bondi, not Bondai.

And Queensland is KNOWN for its beaches! It's called the Sunshine Coast for a reason. Beaches there are so much nicer than Sydney's. And a bit less crowded too.

I love how you describe Sydney Harbour in the last chapter, it really is pretty, it just loses its appeal when you have to take the train past it twice a day P.

And how exactly does Luna Park seem big if they come from Queensland, the land of Theme parks? Dreamworld's broken quite a few records with its rides, and Movie world and Wet n Wild are pretty good too. We go THERE when we want good theme parks, Luna Park is really quite lame, nothing there is actually the least bit scary. Well not for me, anyway, but then again, I love my rollercoasters.

A) The song by Wheatus is just called "Teenage Dirtbag". and

B) It is NOT techno, it's rock.

I really like this story, but there were a few incongruencies that bugged me. I know you said you were going to re write it so I am sure you will catch all these anyway, but the major ones for me were Ms and Mrs Cunningham when you previously stated that the grandmother was the mother's mother and in the very last chapter, you wrote "...recently recovered from a horrific bus crash that took the life of his half-brother...", when he didn't die at all - wasn't he the one that helped pull people out of the bus? Or this could all be mistaken since I just finished reading it and could be missing something...

Sorry for the confusing fragmented sentence!

Off to read your other works :)

I love this story.]

I loved the whole story you did great. It was amazing. I think that you should make a sequel. Cause that would be amazing.

will's announcement was so adorable great job.

What the hell he can't be parilized I mean, that means that he can't dance and not dancing is bad. like really bad.

like i said before will better live

wow, i liked the story, it was really cute.

But i honestly did not like the character of jessica. She was always putting herself down and really she just acted so dumb to me sometimes. But i was falling in love with Will, he just seems perfect. Haha, good story !

WHAT just happened. That is not alowd. I swear if you kill jess or will i will have to kill you.