Reviews for True
Mistress Jakira chapter 1 . 6/22/2004
This is a really awesome poem. It seems like a control poem to me-I mean, it says to me that love exerts control over people in a way. I dunno, but it gives an eerie feeling, whatever it truly means. It seems that the speaker loves someone who is hurt or perhaps on the darker side, in the references to tattered feathers, broken wings, fallen angels, etc. This poem speaks volumes, and I think anyone can find a meaning in its ambiguity. I think this is my favorite of yours! ~MJ
Louis the Rogue chapter 1 . 6/11/2004
Until the end I did not really catch the exact meaning of the poem or its' title but the last line brought it all together for me and the words along the way were so eloquent and pretty that I just kept on reading: sort of like when someone speaks a beautiful language to you but you don't understand the words.
123456789gone chapter 1 . 6/9/2004
Good use of vocabulary, metaphors and adjectives. The punction is a little off in places - something people do not pay enough attention to.
The rhyming scheme is fairly consistent although gets a little broken at the end, slightly disrupting the flow of the poem.
Lastly, leave out the ANs. They detract from the poem, reduce its worth and make you look a touch desperate.
Other than all of that, good work.