Reviews for Bonded |
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![]() ![]() ![]() ... where are you these days? It's been so long now, it's a wonder I haven't forgotten. You've probably forgotten. I miss the times when you would flame the flamers of my stories, so that I wouldn't lose faith in my writing abilities. Those were good times. I've had so many ups and downs since then, so much we could have talked about! But you're gone... B. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, a good story so far. I want to see how this turns out, so start writing some more chapters! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well done! This left me chuckling and wanting more. Please, do keep adding to it, this is such a wonderful start. |
![]() ![]() Neveah, this is wonderful! I am totally on your guys side now after seeing all of that racism in Lundi's bio! Well I'm gonna go surf some more and go play with my transformers toys! Great job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Dont listen to those idiots, i think your writings are awesome. Keep up the awesomeness! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your first chapter blows. Much like my next essay! Jesus hates us all, yay!1!1 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey! Congrats! *High Five* We couldn't have done it without you! You'll be receiving your war medals in the mail any day now! Another great chapter too! You're really keeping me hooked! |
![]() ![]() ![]() To Whom It May Concern: Visit my Biography if you are participating or following this War on Fiction Press... *Just click on Haters VS Nuns that is underlined to the left* |
![]() ![]() ![]() This has started out really well. Cool names, rich, deep, characters and plot. Very good. Oh yeah we changed the name of our Posse to "The Flying Nuns!" |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow cool sotry adn very original. Please write more I cna'twait to see what happens and please I beg of you tell me Keaira has a romance with Hawks oh please! lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like Iluska's charecter. I hope she shows up more often later in the story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Be careful not to make Keaira too perfect. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Needs a little proofreading. Have you by chance lead the Farseer trilogy by Robin Hobb? The story itself is very different, but the idea of bonded animals also comes up in the story, and while most everything else is different, I've never seen an idea quite like it anywhere else. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not bad. There were a few typos that you might want to fix, btu aside from that my only suggestion is to have a bit more of an introduction... show the characters and their relationships a bit before jumping right into the main action. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The beginning seemed a tad bit rushed, but after the wraiths appeared, things were better. I'm curious about the details of the bonding between Iluska and Bianca. |