Reviews for Maeryn of Gleannmara
Whistling Gypsy Rover chapter 2 . 7/19/2004
Hum dee dum... is Maeryn going to fall in love with Rowan? He seems like a nice person. A couple suggestions:
-"complement" should be "compliment."
-'...interrupting, your father."' I think it would be better if this sentence 'ended' with three period or a dash to show that it isn't finished. 'your father...' or 'your father - ' And then when Rowan finishes the sentence begin his dialogue with three periods: '"...calls for me."'
And that is all thus far. I look forward to more.
Whistling Gypsy Rover chapter 1 . 7/19/2004
Violent, yes, but not overly-violent: that is, I don't think it really is PG-13 violence, but it might be wise to notch it up a rating higher than it might actually be considered for those who want to be particularly careful about what they/their children read.
-You gave good background to the story, so we know a little of Maeryn's history.
-A battle as the opening scene is rather sudden. Don't get me wrong: it is very attention-grabbing and often a good thing to have as an opening scene, but perhaps you could give a little more information on how this particular battle started. Not much, but just enough to avoid mild confusion.
Lady Saleci Loramma chapter 2 . 7/18/2004
First off, it seems as though you replaced your first chapter with the second and it makes it a bit wacky to review.
Secondly, lovely update, a bit short I will admit but it seems to be more a of a filler. I love your use of description, I can really feel what your characters are seeing, etc. And I think I know where this is going and I eagerly await to go there. Great work, keep writing. -LSL
softlycryingrain chapter 1 . 7/14/2004
wow, this sounds pretty interesting, I like the setting, although I don't know much about it, so I can't help you much there, sorry. Good job describing the battle, it had me on the edge of my seat for a while there!
Lady Saleci Loramma chapter 1 . 7/8/2004
Very nice, very nice indeed. Just read a book about Isolde which may or may not take place at about the same time as your story. I really like this and eagerly await more. -LSL
Allesandra Thornbird chapter 1 . 6/19/2004
Very nicely described battle scenes. A good beginning. I'm looking foward to reading more, so keep it up!
- Allesandra Thornbird
Anonymous chapter 1 . 6/19/2004
Have you read anything by Linda Windsor?
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