Reviews for taking solace in our imperfections |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Once again, really great message, and you succeeded in getting that message across. Your rhyme scheme is really good and sounds natural. For contructive comments, in your 2nd stanza, the end of all four lines rhyme, and that's inconsistant from the other stanzas. The parantheses definately work in your favor. See if you can't work on the structure of the last stanza (this is, if you want it go be consistant). |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is so cute. It's so true. If only people could understand this from the start, we would never disappoint each other, would we? |
![]() ![]() This is my favorite. Finding happiness in who you are and not being sorry for what you are is amazing. Now if only I could find it.. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh I liked this one very much, I might print it out to add to my collection of poems and songs I like. It's very good ~Mel |
![]() ![]() ![]() very direct lyrics. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow...very straightforward and powerful. you're truly a very talented writer. keep up the good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it a lot... its a good point.. nice repition and rhyming! |
![]() ![]() ![]() you can tell its a song. you realy put your thoughts across in it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I can definitely see this as a song. Well-put; I've wanted to say all of this just as bluntly to a couple "friends" of mine. thx for the reviews _ |
![]() ![]() ![]() You failed to put your email on your biography, so I'll thank you for your review here. This poem was filled with a lot of anger; apparently the narrator has experienced misunderstanding before. You, as the author, took an interesting approach to this poem, not defining the meter or rhythm, which in this poem and situation benefit. The rhyme faded on and off and it was difficult to tell as a reader if it was intensional or not. In my opinion, rhyme can make it a very powerful statement, as can repetition, which you did extremely well-to-do in the final stanza. Congrats! I expect further, more in depth works from you! Miss Fae |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the message you're sending out through this piece. The only thing that bothers me is the "cuz" and the "u". I'm really big on grammar and those just seemed to pop out. I'd say my favorite stanza is the second one. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it. The content is put in there very well; no one should change themselves just to fit someone else's expectations. I very much like the line, "I've paid for my mistakes/So don't expect an apology". Very interesting. I'd like to suggest, though, please get a beta reader. As awesome as this is, it could still be better (as every work by every author could be). Please don't waste your potential by not accepting help to perfect your works. |
![]() ![]() ![]() bravo. i love it. it's perfect on what should be young life. hee hee there are so many rhetorical devices! (just learned about them.) x] |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's really good, i thinking taking solace in our imperfections is something everyone needs to be more comfortable |
![]() ![]() ![]() you are quite right. this is very inspirational. kind of a hey i'm who i want to be and i'm not a conformist and you know what? I DON'T CARE! that's the feel i get from it at least. i really like this peice! congrats. E. Hisifithith |