oh wow, this was really beautiful, I esecially loved the paradoxes and the line 'Is it ignorance, she wonders, that makes the sinless free of pain?' its just so...Im not sure how ot describe it.

This is my favorite of yours, so far. The richness and layers of the visual elements, the beautiful weaving of words - it's a superb piece in every way.

Wow... really good. I have nothing to say in the way of errors. It's so beautifully written; I was mesmerized until the very end.

That was beautiful. I especially loved the line "Innocence robed in sin." Again, keep up the great work!
~The One and Only

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. I love the term "heavy velvet
corruption." I'm not sure why but that was just great. I love the truth in the last stanza that we are all two parts of a whole: black and while, sin and innocence, yin and yang. They blend together so perfectly, saying that there is a fine line of difference between the two. Or perhaps, sin and innocence overlap in the field of gray. Again, fantastic job. It's one of my favorites now *clickity*

Well there's a new story on favorite's list. Very well done.

Thanks for reveiwing my work, I love yours. I can see the effort and time that you've taken with this. Its beautiful. I love the whole contradiciton theme throughout it. I can really see this. I only wish I coulde see into your mind, and grasp it fully like it desevers to be.

interesting. luv the line "the feel of dead flesh beneath her claws."