Reviews for It Hurts When I Breathe In
Dreu chapter 1 . 7/5/2004
Very nice, I like it.
Audrey Portman chapter 1 . 6/24/2004
great; i always love your work. i really like the rhyming and how you got your point across.
Eirien chapter 1 . 6/24/2004
Wonderful. The rhymes and repetitions work extremely well, making it almost sound like a magical incantation or something of that kind. I love the way this can be interpreted on so many levels, the breathing in/ out can be be taken literally, but symbolically as well. The change from breathing in to breathing out in the last line is awitty ending. I love this poem.
MovingLife chapter 1 . 6/23/2004
I like the repetition. I'm not usually a big fan of poems with a repeating line to such an extent, but this refrain is an exception... I can't tell you why, I don't know! The alliteration and rhythm of the last line ("But breathing out will bring release") makes it very effective.
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 6/23/2004
Hehe! I like this one! It has a simple structure, but it is very powerful! Loving it here!
PS: Thanks for reviewing my work.