Reviews for Apocalypse
KalliopesMuse chapter 1 . 7/4/2004
Hi it's me again _
I like your writing style. It's great the way incomplete sentences make things all the more dramatic. Hope you add more stuff soon!
- Sarika
Katsuhiro chapter 1 . 6/26/2004
Well, at least we know the end of the world, like this piece, shall be s.h.o.r.t.
I think you'd do a lot better if you included a more three-dimensional protagonist - Reverend Miliano seems to say one sentence and then go "Ho-hum we're being bombed again. Shite."
Include more characters - vary the flavours of your story and the palate of your reader shall be all the more satiated accordingly.
The descriptions of the terrain itself are good, but you need more... humanity for a topic such as the Apocalypse to render the tragedy all the more affecting.