Reviews for Concentrate
onions-are-joy chapter 1 . 6/19/2005
I like it, it is a little vague but the line "We live like lions and die like mice" is nice.
kool-aid chapter 1 . 6/29/2004
nice poem, has some good imagery... but you might want to work on the details, the whole thing is a bit vauge, and kind of makes the reader wonder 'whats going on?'