Reviews for Untitled 3
lola-in-slacks chapter 1 . 8/11/2004
'I want to lie twitching with period pains'
Nah... you don't
I mitten you beaucoup
Robyn D chapter 1 . 7/4/2004
very emotionally charged, not sure i enjoyed all that much, but i'm not a poem person so don't take offense. might also be the environment i'm reading this in. loud and people bothering me. i'll try reading some of your other stuff tomorrow when i'm less distracted and more able to give it the attention it deserves. this review is just pretty much a way for me to find my way back here...
i read your profile and yah, this poem definitely has the feel of lyrics to it. you can kinda hear a beat if you read it outloud. a little bit of rythm and such. not strong, i can't hear the whole song, but you get a feeling for what this could be.
like i said, not a poem person, so i can't really offer and advice or compliments on the mechanics of the poem, so i'll have to leave it there.
later days