Reviews for View Of The World At Large
Head or Tales chapter 1 . 7/2/2004
I like the title you chose for that one... I really enjoyed the evolution of his life through all the poem.
" They all share the same name, and they all have the same face
And this one man is laughing at his calculated fall from grace "
The way you ended it was just beautiful and so powerful... And how it sounded is cool ( I read it out loud ) cuz everything rhymes. I'd never be able to do that!
( Je pense que ça aussi, c'est très bien ) )
Suzanne Star chapter 1 . 7/1/2004
I think there are too many syllables in the 2nd line of the 2nd stanza...maybe take out "fragment"? But I like the imagery you use in regards to the man, and his life, and his inevitable destruction. :)