Hello, im 14, and im an outcast. I think that you are a great writer and I would to read more of your book.

i dont agree man...if you dont use a comma in a sentance why make a giant ordeal? i think the point of fiction press is too read others WORK and critisize the WORK THAST WRITTEN not HOW ITS written. its my opinion and you have yours. thanks for reviewing none the less.

hey i liked it. keep writing

Oh, what an honor! The royale Me is reviewing the story!
I, personnaly, thought it was great.
And it reminded me of me.
Ha, how can that be you ask?
Because I'm a rocking loner bitch like her!
I'm going to propose to that girl today!
Will you marry me Oh lady with the name of a purple flower?

She doesn't really have a crush on him, she's just thinking about him. He interested her, just because his personality was different from what she was used to. She doesn't necessarily like him, yet, but she might develop a crush in the future..

hmm, so i wanna leave a review so u know i read it. i don't really have anything in particular to say. i like the whole touch chick thing, but i don't really get the immediate crush with bretton seeing as he sounds nothing like what i would picture to be her 'type'.

I like her already! Chapter 2 please, quickmarch.

Aw. I like it. Write more. NOW. Or else I will tell everyone of your crushes! XD Mwah. -Alex

This is going really great, keep up the great work!

Hmm... An interesting enough beginning. Update this soon!