Reviews for Friday |
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![]() ![]() I have to do this via review. I was surprised to see that I was still receiving reviews on this. Thank you. I know that it's been years since I wrote this. I can't change anything to the story because well I forgot my password. Silly me. And the computer I had written all of my work on crashed, I mean full hard drive crash and my backup was useless even though I had made one. I had every intentions of continuing with the story in a sequel but with everything lost including my notes and outline I can't do much. Also I did have quotation marks in the story originally but at some point the site did an update which removed it for so reason in a lot of older stories. It was there but the site removed them so please don't think that I'm a lazy excuse of a writer. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked the story, a lot. The characters were believable and lovable, and the story had it's twists and turns. However, I would have appreciated a filter in the summary that it's sad. I was personally looking for a happier story (due to some personal issues), and I'm sure there are others who reach the end and are like "well, that killed the mood, hopes, dreams..." (please get my exaggeration). Great story, lovely characters, but please put a warning somewhere if the end is like that. . |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is the EXACT reason I read the end before I bother getting too invested in the characters. I HATE CHARACTER DEATH so I always skip to the end. I love happy endings. I wish you had put a warning either stating character death or tragedy instead of romance... but you chose to mislead your readers and so I choose not to review any of your writing. You want to know why I rarely review? because I hate flames so if a story is crap I just say nothing. |
![]() ![]() that was so good, the ending made me bursh out in to tears. I loved all the charaters and genraly the whole story it was amazing |
![]() ![]() ![]() it's very hard to read because you don't use quotation marks, aka these "" |
![]() ![]() ![]() Extremely sad ending! Yup you did accomplish making me cry! I honestly didn't see that ending coming at all. I was still hoping that some how she was alive lol... Your story was good overall though. The only thing that I could see was that there were some grammatical errors throughout the story. Good job! :-) |
![]() ![]() ![]() MEAN! :( *sniffles* I loved it! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() YAY! They finally did IT! *dances* Girls in stories get all the luck *sigh* |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omg... I thought this would end happy, but holy cow! I cried so much I could barely read the words. Your characters grew on me. I felt so bad for Chris and Carmen because they didn't even get to say goodbye to each other. You are such a talented writer. kristen |
![]() ![]() ![]() i really like your story.. the only thing that drives me crazy is that you always spell patience as patients.. lol |
![]() ![]() "And if you think your sole purpose on this planet is to reproduce then you hold to some seriously Mormon ideals." That is a 100% incorrect statement and highly offensive to me. Not only is it a lie, but it is rude and serves no purpose in the story. Mormons generally have more children because they know that children are a blessing and they love them. They also are less selfish than the traditional "modern" parent who doesn't have time or money for children. However, Mormons feel that their main purpose in life is to become more like God through good choices and following the commandments. It in no way has to do with feeling the need to "reproduce" as you so crudely put it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() are u fucking kidding me? ur joking right? u've GOT to be. ur evil. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent ending. |
![]() ![]() OH MY can you do this to them? i thought one of the reasons why people indulge in fiction is because it actually ends some way that leaves us warm and .it's so abrupt - carmen dying.i vote happy! and i will look out for book 2. |
![]() ![]() ![]() book two please! please! jeez, the story had such a sad ending. Right now, in crying my eyes out.I love the story, its just so sad. I cant stop crying... i sound like such a girly girl. and im not usually a girl who cries alot. Wow, but your writing is one of the best! i gotta read book 2! |