Reviews for The Apprentice: FINISHED! |
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![]() ![]() This description of colonial nautical life is poorly researched. The china trade was extremely controlled and NO ship would have visited Tokoyo (named at Edo at the time) as standard Japanese policy for foreign sailors was execution. At seventeen, he would have been a master's mate on the ship being the captain's son. Tea was shipped in chests not crates and all other cargo was shipped in barrels to ease unloading. |
![]() ![]() THANK GOD THERE'S ANOTHER STORY. I love Will so much! And Elizabeth reminds me so much of myself! The only thing I really have to critize is your grammar and spelling... and that is seldom. You consistently spelt "course" wrong. The "coarse" used is in terms of the texture of something, ex: "She had coarse hair." And I also saw "lier" which should be "liar." But anyway, other than those two small mistakes,it was pretty great! There were a few questionable grammar mistakes.. but, heh, that's just me. I'm picky when it comes to that kind of stuff. :P But, like I said. Wow. So glad there's a second story. :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whoa. This looks really really fascinating, but unfortunately, I can't read it just yet. I'll need to find a day when I have absolutely nothing to do...but I promise I will, and I promise that I'll actually review about the story itself. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() AH! :] Wow Railee- that's really all I can say. *blushes* I read the whole book in a day- I didn't get much done today, but it was worth it. *laughs evilly* I can't wait to read your other books! _~ I think I might have to pace myself better though. I love your characters and how you keep it so nice and neat. There isn't LOTS of plot, but I LOVE it- I love the characters. I wish and hope that I can try and develop my characters like you have. *runs off to bed* TTYL- Chelsea |
![]() ![]() ![]() She's so stubborn! Ha, ha! I hope she sees the light soon... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sweetness! I love it! I can't help but notice some of the similarities between this and Pirates of the Carribean. Good similarity. I like it lots! Despite the wonderful characters of Will and Elizabeth, I must say Ben is my favourite. I do have a brother named that... Also he's a Son! I love this period in history and I'm so glad you took it up. Did you say there was a sequel? I'll finish this up quick and them move on. You did a GREAT job on this! Your descriptions on the characters are superb! I can totally see them. Ha, ha, I love the fights! ~Jena Grant |
![]() ![]() ![]() Mmkay. I'm kind of in a rush right now so I can't quite ... leave a great review because honestly, I didn't read the first chapter. But it looks amazing. EEP. Okay, so I really want to read it, and I'm going to attempt a nice, well-rounded review when A) I have time and B) when I get home or to the library or wherever I shall be this afternoon. Like I said, looks great. Kat |
![]() ![]() ![]() WHY? THE ENDING SUCKS. but i know theres a sequel.. but it's so... urgh. but i love it. lolz. the fic's really good and although its kinda cliche.. it's still good. urgh. im being redundant. just keep on updating the next sequel.. is it finished or not? anyways. thanks for the fantastic read! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I must say that despite Elizabeth's initial dislike of Will making her into a bit of a - well, a bitch, I do really like her. And I can just picture her face in my mind, smiling as she anticipated Will's reaction to missing his ship. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Intriguing first chapter, I must say. I think I like Will's character - a bit brass, but not overly so. And his interaction with the ladies on the docks was rather amusing. I'm looking forward to reading the rest! |
![]() ![]() ![]() AMAZING JOB. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() this is a really good story. you're an excellent writer |
![]() ![]() WOW this is the BEST [no joke] BOOK EVER! It drove me insaine so I had to read it all! on to the next book!Jessica |
![]() ![]() ![]() RAILEE YOU SLY SLY GIRL YOU! Don't you know it's against the Authers code of honor to end a story like this! It's unbaribly sad and, I feel so depressed! How could Will leave? I am shaking with anger at this moment! You are lucky your not in the same room as me or I would- wait I can I live in the same house as you! HERE I COME! Monkey p.s. you better be scared! |